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| 2017 Project Groups | |||||
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Here is the Student Page demonstration page I showed in the Practical class.
Use this page to practice editing and don't forget to add a topic to the 2017 Group Project 6 page.
Peer Review
Group 1
Overall the project was very good and clear. Pictures were well placed and bullet points spaced out information, making the page easy to look at and follow. The layout of the beginning and end sections with the short paragraphs and interspersed bullet points broke up the information and highlighted key facts. The introduction was a good overview of the page, including a quick summary of the anatomy, function, and development of the cerebral cortex.
There were some basic grammatical and spelling errors (e.g. “neurons” is spelled wrong under the subheading “Layer 4”), but for the most part did not take away from the clarity of the page. One sentence, “From there three primary vesicles, there is a further division at the anterior extremity of the medullary canal into five secondary vesicles during week five,” seems to be missing something at the beginning that would increase clarity.
Some pictures had a lot of information in the summary when clicking on them while others lacked sufficient information. Some pictures that could benefit from more information are Corticogenesis of mouse and humans.jpeg, SBH.png, Disorders of Cortical Formation2.png, Symptoms of microcephaly.png, Hemimegalencephaly.png, and SchizencephalicBrain.jpg. These pictures are relevant to the topic and are pretty self-explanatory so this does not take away much clarity from the page but for the parameters of the project, additional summary should be added. The picture Stage22 HPA2L.jpg has good information in the summary but it is oddly structured. FASface.jpeg does not have any copyright information included. Having Gray754.png displayed on the page rather than as a link would look better.
The video describing the functions of the cerebral cortex was a good introduction to that topic. The video was easy to watch and understand. The first video about corpus callosum agenesis was a good introduction to the topic, but the second video about corpus callosum agenesis was long and the lecturer was hard to understand. That subheading would benefit from a brief description of that topic rather that a long video explanation.
The switch from a mix of bullets and short paragraphs to all bullet points in Anatomy of the Cerebral Cortex makes the page look less cohesive. The last bullet point in Layer 4 is hard to understand and the last 2 bullet points in Layer 5 would flow better if they were combined. The information in these sections are good and relatively easy to follow.
Overall the project is very good. The table explaining the timetable of cortex development is a clear way to break down the topic. There is a lot of information about the abnormal development of the cortex but could use some information about past and current research and animal studies.
Lil Embryo
