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Mark Hill - Lab 1 page |
Peer Review
Group project 1 (Cerebral Cortex)
This page needs some more information about current research, signaling processes, future questions and references to animal models. It would also be good with a table or quick overview of developmental origin. There has been a good use of pictures and tables. The setup of the section about abnormalities is really good. This page needs to use more references during the sections and not only at the start of a section. A glossary list would also be good for the reader to understand the page.
- Introduction: Gives a quick knowledge of the cerebral cortex. A picture would be good to support this introduction and maybe a bit more description of the different terms. This section also needs references.
- Early Development: Good setup with bulleting. I find some of the context a bit confusing to read - especially these two sentences "From there three primary vesicles, there is a further division at the anterior extremity of the medullary canal into five secondary vesicles during week five" and "During the fifth week, the embryonic brain undergoes rapid growth folding the neural tube and consequently resulting in three brain flexures" Maybe you can rephrase this.
- Development of Cerebral Cortex: Good section! Good overview.
- Timeline of Corticogenesis: Please give a short introduction of what Corticogenesis and Neurogenesis means. Good picture supporting the E50-55, maybe you can put this picture already in the section called "Key developmental zones in the human cortex" since this is the first time we get introduced to the different zones and plates and it would give a better basic knowledge before getting into Corticogenesis.
- Anatomy and Function of the Cerebral Cortex: These two sections should maybe be earlier on the project page together with the introduction since it's a basic understanding of the Cerebral Cortex. Both sections look a bit messy, try to work on making it more simple and easier to read - it kind of looks like personal notes and not a proper information site :-) These sections also need some references. The video in this section gives a good understanding. Good idea putting a video on the page.
- Abnormalities associated with Cerebral Cortex Development: This section is really good. Great overview of the different scenarios and a lot of pictures to support the reading. Instead of mentioning all the references in the start of the section, you should add the specific reference used for each subsection, this will make it easier for the reader to look up references for specific sections.
Group project 2 (Kidney)
Good project page that goes through almost everything required for the page – the Current Research and Future questions section is lacking context though. The project is well written and easy to understand. Some sections have a better layout than others, so maybe you can work on making the same layout for the whole page. Some sections also have the wrong formatting of references, but other sections have perfect formatting. You must be careful with copy-pasting (Blood supply section) text into your project page without giving a reference from where you copy pasted the text from. Some of the pictures on the page also need more information on the image page itself like copyright information. It is good that you have added figure number to your pictures and a little description of it – this helps the reader to understand the context.
- The introduction to the Kidney is a really good, informative section. You need to change the format of your references in this section though. The layout might be a little bit confusing since there is a title “Kidney Structure” is in the middle of the page due to the pictures on each site.
- Nephron development and The developmental Abnormalities: These sections have a different layout compared to the earlier sections. It’s a lot of text, so try to make it look a bit more comfortable for the reader to go through. Maybe you can try to make the layout similar to some of the other sections and give the page a better flow.
Group project 3 (Heart)
The page goes through everything required for the project page. It would be nice if the pictures on the page have a figure number and a short title on the figures, so it is easier for the reader to understand what figure belongs to what part of the section. A figure number on the picture makes it able for the writer to refer to a specific picture. There is a good use of tables and self-drawn figures/picture. This makes the page clearer and more readable. There are some references on the page that needs a different formatting, so it is not fully viewed in the sections. It is important that the references are given right after the specific section and not at the bottom of the section.
- The Introduction section gives a good excitement for the reader before reading the page. This gives an idea of what information to expect from the page. A little section about the anatomy of the heart and a picture could give a better preparation for the reader to understand the developmental part of the heart.
- The Development Origin section has a bit confusing layout.
- I like that the Cardiac Neural Crest and Outflow tract sections have a self-drawn picture, but maybe you can draw it a bit clearer, so it is easier to read the writing and understand the figure There is no figure text on the page of the figure.
- Current Research And Findings, Animal Models and Abnormal Development: These sections have a bit of a messy layout. The context is good, but there I a lot of text and pictures kind of mingling into each other. You could make these sections more separate in the layout.
- The Glossary of terms helps the reader a lot.
Group project 5 (Lung)
A good page going through a lot of the main steps required for the project page, but the page needs a lot of references.
- The Lung Anatomy, Histology, and Cardiovasculature sections give a good and short understanding of the lungs. The Histology part could need a better layout using the wiki-formatting. All the sections need references! There are almost no references in these sections. I like the big introduction to the lungs, but I am not sure how much it has to do with the embryonic development – especially the Histology part. The self-drawn pictures support the learning when reading, but they are a bit weak in colors. I must click on the figure and then zoom to read and see details of the figures. It would be nice if you can see details at the same time reading the project page. Maybe you should draw the pictures with a more colorful pen.
- The developmental timeline is really detailed and has a lot of pictures to support the understanding. The images have the right information.
- The Conducting System section has two pictures that need more information on the picture page – like copyright information. You can look on the image tutorial how do give a picture page proper information or look through some of the other sections on your group project.
- Alveolus: the functional unit: This section explains a study about overweight in pregnancy, but does not give the reference of the study. It is important to tell the reader where you found this study.
- Developmental signaling processes section gives a good, short description. Easy to read and understand. But both pictures are missing detailed information – also copyright information. You also mention “a recent study” without giving a reference to the study.
- Current understandings and areas of research section is missing the context.
- Animal Models section has a good context and a good setup but could use a brief introduction to what you are going to talk about. Maybe also a figure could be nice to support the reading. You also mention Bmp as a key pathway but does not explain much about it. Since it is mentioned in the short introduction, then the reader would expect that there will be more information about that specific pathway.
- Abnormal Development is a really good section. It has a lot of references, is easy to read and understand, has the right information on the pictures, beautiful layout. I like that it gives a short understanding of the different abnormalities.
Group project 6 (Cerebellum)
Really good project page. The page goes through almost everything required for the project. You need a section about Further Questions and Current Research. The project is really well written and easy to understand. There is a good introduction giving the reader an idea of what to expect from the project page and good use of pictures giving a basic understanding of the anatomy of the cerebellum. There is a lot of use of figures and tables, which makes it easier for the reader to understand the subject. Most of the figures have a figure number and text, this also makes it easier to get a quick view of what the text refers to. The layout of the page is also comfortable to go through, but I do think the title Cerebellum in blue is a bit disturbing. There is good use of references.
- It seems like you have mixed the context in Basic Anatomy of the Cerebellum section and the Cerebellum Development. During the 'Anatomy section, you start describing the developmental origin, which I think would fit better in the Developmental section.
- The first section in the Cerebellum Development has a lot of text. Maybe you can make some subsections to split of the text and makes it more comfortable to read.
- The Cerebellum Developmental weeks table is really good and has good use of pictures. But the format makes it really big. Maybe you can do this part in a different way, so it does not take that much space. For the table about the second trimester, it would be a good support for the reader to add pictures to this table too – like the first-trimester table.
- The Key Historical Discoveries has a lot of text. Maybe you can add some pictures or change the layout a bit.
Wiki-page practice
Student Page #Internal page
PubMed #Page from outside
Upload Image Tutorial
PubMed Central Image Search - Eye development
Search Databases
embryo search - embryo
notochord search - notochord
Salmon Ref
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