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Peer review feedback
Cerebral cortex
- Introduction
- Could have been linked together with anatomy and function for better structuring of page
- Simple diagram could have been used to provide context on body location
- Development of the cerebral cortex
- Section should be expanded upon to give context to the content
- Seemed like a sudden introduction of neuronal classes and key developmental zones without much expansion
- Section seemed to be more about components of the developing cerebral cortex rather than development itself – could update subheading to reflect this or update content to focus more on development
- Section should be expanded upon to give context to the content
- Timeline of corticogenesis
- Could have been its own subheading
- Anatomy
- Should be moved up towards start of the page with introduction
- Functions
- Should be moved up towards start of page with introduction
- Functional areas should be expanded upon to briefly discuss their different roles
- Should not rely too much on linked video
- Abnormalities
- Diagram “disorders of cortical formation” gave little information relating to section – seemed like illustration related little to the mentioned stages. Instead, could have mentioned that abnormalities arise during proliferation, migration and organisation during cortical development
- Lettering and numbering of subheadings in this section should be switched for clarity
- Overall was well done. However:
- Some diagrams lacked descriptions and figure legends/abbreviation definitions – diagrams should be self-explanatory and be understandable in combination with their descriptions, when taken out of their contexts within the page
- Minor grammatical errors present throughout the page
- Mostly well-structured but some subheadings can be shifted around - see above for specific feedback
- Remember to clear zIDs before final submission
Kidney
- Introduction
- Solid with nice exploration on anatomy and function
- Genes expressed
- Should include some citations to support statements made e.g. in "current literature highlights..."
- Blood supply
- Be wary of plagiarism
- Developmental abnormalities
- Extensive but suitably brief
- Some efforts made to explore complications of the abnormalities discussed but could be expanded on further
- Current research
- If papers are going to be listed for viewer's further reading, brief summaries of their abstracts of content should be included
- Overall, solid effort and well-structured page. However:
- Minor grammatical errors present throughout page
- Intext citations should be checked thoroughly before final submission
- Remember to clear zIDs before final submission
Heart
- Introduction
- Justification of chosen topic was an interesting approach
- Developmental signalling processes
- Links between explored processes and heart development were made by could be more explicitly presented
- Current research and findings
- May have been too extensive at times
- Felt like there was un-needed focus on methods used in the explored projects. Section could be streamlined to have less focus on methods and more highlighting of results of experiments presented
- May have been too extensive at times
- Overall, well-structured and well written. However:
- Minor grammatical errors present throughout the page
- Some diagrams lacked descriptions and figure legends/abbreviation definitions – diagrams should be self-explanatory and be understandable in combination with their descriptions, when taken out of their contexts within the page
- remember to remove zIDs before final submission