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Very impressive work so far guys! Your page covers a comprehensive topic very well, without focussing too much on certain subheadings at the expense of others. Your use of both tables and images is excellent so far. It's good to see that you have also included a video to give some variety to the media on your page. The 'background information' gives context to the issues which you discuss and though it might not be of great use for someone familiar with embryology, it would be a great help to those with no experience in this field and is therefore useful in establishing the topic of male infertility. | Very impressive work so far guys! Your page covers a comprehensive topic very well, without focussing too much on certain subheadings at the expense of others. Your use of both tables and images is excellent so far. All necessary copyright information seems to be present for the images that you have uploaded. It's good to see that you have also included a video to give some variety to the media on your page. The 'background information' gives context to the issues which you discuss and though it might not be of great use for someone familiar with embryology, it would be a great help to those with no experience in this field and is therefore useful in establishing the topic of male infertility. | ||
The only things that could be changed to improve your wiki page is perhaps altering the location of tables and pictures on your page. For example all pictures are located on the right side of the page, although not a significant issue, becomes slightly monotonous as one progresses through the page. It may be worth alternating pictures between left and right to mix things up a little bit and improve the overall flow of the page. | The only things that could be changed to improve your wiki page is perhaps altering the location of tables and pictures on your page. For example all pictures are located on the right side of the page, although not a significant issue, becomes slightly monotonous as one progresses through the page. It may be worth alternating pictures between left and right to mix things up a little bit and improve the overall flow of the page. |
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2015 Projects: Three Person Embryos | Ovarian Hyper-stimulation Syndrome | Polycystic Ovarian Syndrome | Male Infertility | Oncofertility | Preimplantation Genetic Diagnosis | Students
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--Mark Hill (talk) 11:20, 25 September 2015 (AEST) OK I discussed this with your group in last week's lab. you have not shown animal models, graphics, histology, media etc to really build your project page. The introduction does not give me a clear idea of the scope of the project. Not ready for peer review.
Hey guys, I have just had a really quick look on PubMed and I found a good starting article. Its a review article (I'm pretty sure) so I'm not sure if we can use it, but it discusses some interesting genetic causes of male infertility and also references a lot of primary articles.
PMID 26178295
--Z3462124 (talk) 13:38, 25 August 2015 (AEST)
I can't seem to view anything but the first page of the article but the introduction gives a good idea on what male infertility is and how it arises. At the moment I have found 2 research articles that address factors that can increase male fertility. Although they do not address male infertility conditions specifically, in the discussion they imply that these methods can be applied to men who have them such as oligospermia and azoospermia. I feel as though we can use these articles when discussing alternative therapies for successful conception. Please have a read and share your opinions!
PMID 22958644 - note that you can only view the condensed version of this article
PMID 26097523 - you can view the whole article on biomed (subheadings in the discussion particularly addresses male infertility)
--Z3462297 (talk) 14:17, 25 August 2015 (AEST)
Hey guys, it was pretty hard finding research articles from Pubmed regarding the epidemiology of male infertility. For now, I have found an article about sperm extraction which I thought could be an alternative for treatments. However I can't view the full article without paying, but the abstract from Pubmed seems to sum it up. So, I came across a research article addressing the epidemiology and aetiology of male infertility, through Pubmed it doesn't have a direct link to the full PDF article however I linked it you guys on Facebook so have a read!
PMID 22128297
PMID 9663768
--Z3463514 (talk) 11:59, 26 August 2015 (AEST)
Hello everyone! To get started, I just added a few headings on the page where you can add your research/review articles. Feel free to add more subheadings or change the wording of the titles - I'm sure we will need to as we research more. From looking at other groups' pages, I think it is also important we add a bit of 'Background Information" regarding the process of spermatogenesis and how any abnormalities can cause infertility so we can all look for articles as we go. Remember we are targeting this towards students like us, so a bit of key background info is essential.
--Z3462297 (talk) 00:06, 27 August 2015 (AEST)
I just posted the articles that I found on male infertility. It was kind of hard to find ones because I stuck to studies in humans- but i found some good ones that were studies on rats (not sure if we can use them) and also some good secondary or review articles that we could use as background information maybe? So I'll just post the PMID's here..
- PMID 26303086
- PMID 23725463
- PMID 25160621
- PMID 25142466
--Z3462124 (talk) 09:59, 27 August 2015 (AEST)
Not sure if we are review articles are any good, but I thought that it's also important to talk about "detecting abnormalities". I came across this review article which talks about the "male genital tract - colour dopple ultrasound" is a useful tool to detect impaired reproductive health.
PMID 25038770
--Z3463514 (talk) 19:59, 27 August 2015 (AEST)
Good thinking! If anyone comes across more articles regarding this, please post them up! I'll add a 'diagnosis' sub-heading to the page
--Z3462297 (talk) 22:23, 27 August 2015 (AEST)
Hey guys, found a couple of articles describing different methods of ARTs for male infertility:
These 2 talk about Intrauterine Insemination (IUI) PMID 26294874 PMID 26288981
Also, another potential sub-heading to research might be the risks involved different ARTs E.g. the following article about the prevalence of birth defects after a number of different male-related ARTs PMID 26265143
--Z3462833 (talk) 23:38, 27 August 2015 (AEST)
That sounds good. I think mentioning risks are important to show what is successful and what isnt. Feel free to add it under the "ART" heading (as a sub-heading)
--Z3462297 (talk) 23:06, 31 August 2015 (AEST)
Hey I found this article that discusses some ARTs for infertile men. Its not a bad read and has info on two different methods, Intracytoplasmic morphologically selected sperm injection (IMSI) and conventional intracytoplasmic sperm injection (cICSI). You can read the full text on biomod
PMID 26307050
--Z3462297 (talk) 17:27, 1 September 2015 (AEST)
LOOK!
This is a really good review article that talks about causes, diagnosis AND treatments. I recommend everyone to read it!
PMID 21243017
--Z3462297 (talk) 11:09, 2 September 2015 (AEST)
Peer Assessment
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To start, I think some of your subheadings are a bit unnecessary, for example, you could get away without having the subheading “background information” and just having the sub-subheadings as subheadings below your intro. Whilst some subheadings are good as it helps break down the info in the table of contents, it makes the actual page difficult to read and follow.
Great use of images on the page. There are many, without it cluttering the page and they are simple and relevant. However, the pictures you have used under “background information” appear to be a bit lifeless and complex. Perhaps using more simplified images with some colours would help liven up the section as well as allow people who use this page, with less scientific knowledge than you, to understand what they are seeing. They are important images as they set the basis for the rest of the page. It would also be good to see a hand-drawn image on the page.
Your use of tables is also great, it really helps to break down the information. I would suggest however, you include a little more information and references under the section “male infertility disorders”. It is a big vague and there are no citations. Your list of references is incredible and you should be commended on that. It shows a great deal of research has gone into this page. Your citations appear to be correctly done throughout the page. Your “Causes of fertility” section is done really well and is very thorough. The video accompanying it is good to as it is easy to understand and explanatory. Your “risk factors and prevention” heading could use more work. I would suggest actually splitting them up into two separate headings and really delving more into prevention and how to handle infertility.
Your “treatment” section is really well done and thorough. I would suggest however, to make it easier to read, that you simplify some of your paragraphs into bullet points. A glossary section may also be useful for people reading this page with a lesser degree of embryology knowledge than you or I. I will say, this page has covered its chosen topic well and has attacked it from an embryologically focused angle. Lastly I would suggest including a section on animal models and the literature for the more advanced student.
Very impressive work so far guys! Your page covers a comprehensive topic very well, without focussing too much on certain subheadings at the expense of others. Your use of both tables and images is excellent so far. All necessary copyright information seems to be present for the images that you have uploaded. It's good to see that you have also included a video to give some variety to the media on your page. The 'background information' gives context to the issues which you discuss and though it might not be of great use for someone familiar with embryology, it would be a great help to those with no experience in this field and is therefore useful in establishing the topic of male infertility.
The only things that could be changed to improve your wiki page is perhaps altering the location of tables and pictures on your page. For example all pictures are located on the right side of the page, although not a significant issue, becomes slightly monotonous as one progresses through the page. It may be worth alternating pictures between left and right to mix things up a little bit and improve the overall flow of the page. It might also be worth including a short video underneath the 'surgical treatments' subheading to give a visual example of some of the techniques discussed.
Furthermore a subheading on future research could possibly be included under the 'treatments' subheading to give the reader information on techniques and therapies which may come to prominence in the near future.
Your wiki page thus far is very impressive! Excellent work so far. --Z3416054 (talk) 17:18, 13 October 2015 (AEDT)