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31 July 2018
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Neuropore cell shape changes[1]
Reference
PMID: 30056110
Walls ML & Hart RJ. (2018). In vitro maturation. Best Pract Res Clin Obstet Gynaecol , , . PMID: 30056110 DOI.
In vitro maturation recent article[1]
Peer Assessment Week 10
Mark Hill (talk) 11:29, 11 October 2018 (AEDT) You have provided some reasonable peer feedback in your very brief assessments that includes both positive and negative components. Your feedback is consistent in that it looks at common features in each project, in particular the introduction sections. You also offer suggestions that could improve the final submissions. My own feedback would be perhaps providing a slightly longer feedback. Also when identifying "formatting issues", it is always good to give an example. I hope the groups consider this along with other feedback on their final submission next week. Many thanks.
Melanocytes
The introduction is good, however it may be helpful to mention more the embryonic development and an outline of what is going to be talked about. There are good subheadings, some need some content though. The division throughout the page of ears and eyes etc. is very clear. A short paragraph at the start of adult structure and function to tie it together (also in abnormalities, in case there are any in common). The pictures are helpful and assist understanding. There are a few formatting issues to clear up once the content is sorted. The references are looking good and there is evidence of a lot of research. The information so far is interesting, easy to follow and understand.
Cardiac
An introduction would be helpful to outline the project and bring in an understanding of development and neural crest contribution. The overview of the heart is very clear and detailed. Referencing needs a bit of work to ensure that the information is valid. There is a lot of in depth information which gives a detailed understanding of neural crest contribution to cardiac development. I would suggest reconsidering the structure, for example putting the developmental timeline earlier in the project.
Dorsal Root Ganglion
It would be good if there was a more fleshed out introduction, that outlined the purpose and scope of the project. The referencing is very comprehensive and shows that a lot of research has been put in. The information is presented will and is very in depth. In the Molecular Mechanisms section, I would suggest an introduction sentence or two, to tie the section together and help it to flow, overall it looks on track, but I would recommend having a think about the flow of the project and the layout of the information in terms of subheadings, an introduction would help to make that flow clear.
