Talk:2017 Group Project 1
|Student Projects: 1 Cerebral Cortex | 2 Kidney | 3 Heart | 4 Eye | 5 Lung | 6 Cerebellum|
|Student Page - here is the sample page I demonstrated with in the first labs.I remind all students that you have your own Group Forum on Moodle for your discussions, it is only accessible by members of your group.|
I have now added a discussion Forum for your group to Moodle. You can add your discussion here (available to everyone) or in your Moodle Group Discussion (available to only your group members).
The collapsible table below shows the assessment criteria that will be used for this group project.
About the Discussion Page
This should be considered as the "other side" of the project page. It is an area where you can:
- Assemble resources.
- Add useful links.
- Discuss your project with team members. (Please do not use student names on any page on this Wiki)
- Paste your Peer Assessments. (Added anonymously, do not identify yourself)
https://www.ncbi.nlm.nih.gov/pubmedhealth/PMHT0024757/ Z5177691 (talk) 22:37, 23 August 2017 (AEST)
Lobes and Function
Nature article: https://www.nature.com/nrn/journal/v9/n2/full/nrn2252.html Z5177691 (talk) 22:57, 23 August 2017 (AEST)
Anatomy and Function
-change from dot points
-finish function information
This page is very well structured and sequential. It provides a very detailed explanation of development under chronological subheadings. Subpages under images are well informed, but some images lack a proper Copyright phrase to indicate reproducibility. On the main page, some subheadings need to be capitalised (formatting) and student signatures need to be provided on relevant sections. The "Anatomy of the Cerebral Cortex" section is filled with dot points, and could be improved using Wiki formatting. The layout of the Abnormalities section could be improved, by changing the headings and subheadings. The page could benefit from a glossary list and 'Future Research' section. However, the reference list was well constructed. Overall the the page addresses the brief very well.
Be careful in how the sentences are expressed for example in the introduction ‘the cerebral cortex is actually the outermost layer’; avoid using ‘actually’ in this sentence. Don’t forget to remove the student numbers from the posts. Minor grammatical errors; no use of commas in long sentences. The images do include copyright however the team has forgotten to place the Student Image Template that is required. The team should add a small description of the images that are on their webpage so readers will see immediately what the image is showing. The team could do a further questions subheading or an animal model subheading to explore more on the research of the Cerebral Cortex.
Subheadings and content that have been used show a good understanding of the topic area. The use of dot points where necessary are done well which makes the project easier to understand and read through. The use of tables to demonstrate the ‘Timeline of Corticogenesis’ is done comprehensively; maybe an image for each day that is explained should be added to show consistency (as only the last row has an image). The team has used their own diagrams which shows that the team was innovative in displaying their research. The references used are cited correctly, however, there are links at the bottom where they need to fix up and place it under references.
Overall, the page is well structured and relatively easy to follow with the headings and subheadings relevant to the topic area (embryology of the cerebral cortex) The introduction was short and concise, which provided a relevant amount of background knowledge. Perhaps the anatomy and functions of the cerebral cortex could be put before the development so that it ties in with the introduction, however there is good amount of information under these subheadings. The images and videos were very relevant to the topic, which aided in understanding the content, however perhaps you could label them using "Figure 1", or "Table 1" etc as well as putting an appropriate description under the image/video. The use of the table on the "Timeline of Corticogenesis" as well as a good amount of dot points made it easier to understand and read through. The page is lacking a "further questions" section which would be quite informative in understanding the research gap to date. There are a good amount of references so far and they were done correctly. Well done.
The page has good structure and formatting, however there is a significant unfinished touch. Anatomy of the Cerebral Cortex heading could place all the information in a table to make it easier to read as well as images to help the viewer visualise the process. Maybe remove the student numbers because they are unnecessary and make the page look not as professional. figures and tables need to be labelled as well as referencing and copyright claims. The diagram under the statement "Migration and division of all six layers of the cortex is completed during the third trimester. Each layer has distinct synaptic connections and cell types that contribute to the specific functions of the cortex." needs to be further explained because I had a hard time understanding the image and what each section meant. The video is a nice touch to help understand the function and placement of the cerebral cortex. Developmental abnormalities was well written, easy to understand and flowed nicely.
The layout is looking very good, pictures could be a little smaller. I like the choice of headings, they explain well what is going to be talked about. I feel like you need to add headings like animal models and current research needs to be fixed but I’m sure that’s what is intended. I have some minor points for some of the headings: Early development: Spelling: Rhomboncephalon, and the instead of three at the beginning of a paragraph. Overall this heading was covered well Development of cerebral cortex: With images, you can add figure titles and this could make your page flow better!! Maybe expand a bit more on the key developmental zones in the human cortex, a brief explanation of what happens could help. The table is very well explained, however for E50-55 I can’t see a reference for all the information, also for the picture in the table for E50-55, you haven’t copied the copyright information so you should add that so it can be used in the page and also add the student template. I really like the drawn picture, but again a figure description would be helpful. This section is very well done. Anatomy of the cerebral cortex Some great points but needs to be broken up into paragraphs. Your Wikipedia link for the image is a good image however you should find the original, I recognize it from Cajal’s drawings so I think it could be in a paper about the cerebellum with Cajal. You have good ideas for this heading, also maybe add another image. Functions of the cerebral cortex For functional areas, I think a 2 sentence description of each area would be good and maybe a picture for reference. Abnormalities Intext referencing would be better. For images, add the student template to each!! Im not entirely sure how I feel about the youtube screenshots as images, maybe use one but try and find some in research articles aswell. Overall, I think you’ve done a really good job at summarizing abnormalities.
The introduction was a good opening to the Cortex page as it gives a brief overview and understanding of the cortex generally. The next subheading, “Early development of the Brain”, provides of a simple and clear explanation of the early development process however images would be a great addition to help visualise the text. Try having a look at some images that were shown to us in previous lectures on the brain development where it showed the neural plate, neuroectoderm and subsequent developments. The next subheading, “Development of Cerebral Cortex”, would probably do better to be called “Later Development of Cerebral Cortex” as it would be a seamless flow from the previous subheading of “Early development…”. It was good that a labelled image was used and information was added for explanation. It helped orient me as I was going on to read about the timeline of corticogenesis. The timeline was detailed and the use of bold helped highlight key terms. However, I would suggest making another column for images on each day. Visual reinforcement just makes the information easier to absorb and make more sense. The subheading, “Anatomy of the Cerebral Cortex”, is clearly in the editing process. I would just once again definitely recommend the use of images in this section, both hand-drawn diagrams and labelled images from the internet. I thought the use of a video was a clever way to cover the cerebral cortex functions. A bit of general text that briefly covers the functions of the main parts would be a good addition in this section, as a segue into the video. The “Abnormalities” subheading was a good balance of text and images. It was easier to read because it was split into categories. I would only suggest that you mention at the beginning of the section that abnormalities associated with the cerebral cortex development can be divided into the following categories… I can see the references were placed at the beginning of the section and I’m assuming that is temporary. It is better if they are dispersed within the text where appropriate. There are a good bunch of references but you could probably aim for 25-30 for this page.
This page needs some more information about current research, signaling processes, future questions and references to animal models. It would also be good with a table or quick overview of developmental origin. There has been a good use of pictures and tables. The setup of the section about abnormalities is really good. This page needs to use more references during the sections and not only at the start of a section. A glossary list would also be good for the reader to understand the page.
- Introduction: Gives a quick knowledge of the cerebral cortex. A picture would be good to support this introduction and maybe a bit more description of the different terms. This section also needs references.
- Early Development: Good setup with bulleting. I find some of the context a bit confusing to read - especially these two sentences "From there three primary vesicles, there is a further division at the anterior extremity of the medullary canal into five secondary vesicles during week five" and "During the fifth week, the embryonic brain undergoes rapid growth folding the neural tube and consequently resulting in three brain flexures" Maybe you can rephrase this.
- Development of Cerebral Cortex: Good section! Good overview.
- Timeline of Corticogenesis: Please give a short introduction of what Corticogenesis and Neurogenesis means. Good picture supporting the E50-55, maybe you can put this picture already in the section called "Key developmental zones in the human cortex" since this is the first time we get introduced to the different zones and plates and it would give a better basic knowledge before getting into Corticogenesis.
- Anatomy and Function of the Cerebral Cortex: These two sections should maybe be earlier on the project page together with the introduction since it's a basic understanding of the Cerebral Cortex. Both sections look a bit messy, try to work on making it more simple and easier to read - it kind of looks like personal notes and not a proper information site :-) These sections also need some references. The video in this section gives a good understanding. Good idea putting a video on the page.
- Abnormalities associated with Cerebral Cortex Development: This section is really good. Great overview of the different scenarios and a lot of pictures to support the reading. Instead of mentioning all the references in the start of the section, you should add the specific reference used for each subsection, this will make it easier for the reader to look up references for specific sections.
In the introduction section, it was not referenced where the information facts are from. This section should introduce a brief information on the topic, what you are going to discuss on the whole wiki page, introduce current researches and animal models to support the new findings and understandings. Also, don't use "actually" in the sentence. On the page, It is better to write in full sentences instead of dot points as I've seen a lot of them and include any of scientific words in the glossary section at the end of the page. Where you've inserted picture, it will be clearer to also include it within the text in brackets for example (Figure 1). Any figures or pictures on this page needs references as well. In the abnormality section, it is well written with supporting pictures, but in my opinion, it is easier to read if the the figures/pictures are on the same side and texts on the other side instead of alternating. This section was very thoroughly referenced too. I think a small paragraph under the heading introducing the different type of disorders before going into greater details. Don't focus too much on the anatomy as I can see this section is not finished nor written in paragraph and no pictures or figures, would be better to swap anatomy with some other embryology discussion for example, signalling processes. Touch on current researches, animal model if any and future questions as they were not seen on the page. Also include a glossary table. References section is looking good but more is needed.
Overall I find the information provided to be concise and easy to understand. The introduction was great in giving us a brief overview of page. The layout of the early development of the brain and the development of the cerebral cortex was really nice. I like the use of bullet points as this makes it easier to read. Also good amount of referencing is seen in this area. The use of the table is also a nice touch to the page and I like the picture used for E50-55. However, it could help to have another column with pictures for each row. That would help with the understanding of the text. For the anatomy of the cerebral cortex, it seems a little messy and hard to read as it is too point form. Perhaps these could be phrased into proper sentences with certain parts placed into bullet points to make it easier to read. Also, with the anatomy, pictures would be very helpful to aid in the explanation. For the functions of the cerebral cortex, it lists the functional areas but not the functions of those areas. Although it is stated in the video, which is a nice addition to the page, this could be improved by adding short sentences that state these functions that were mentioned as well. For Sections 1.4 and 1.5, references are also needed to state where the information was obtained from. The abnormalities section provides detailed explanations of the various disorders associated with the development of the cerebral cortex. There is also a good amount of pictures used. One thing I noticed was the references which was placed on the top of the section instead of throughout the text.