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Overall I find the information provided to be concise and easy to understand. The introduction was great in giving us a brief overview of page. The layout of the early development of the brain and the development of the cerebral cortex was really nice. I like the use of bullet points as this makes it easier to read. Also good amount of referencing is seen in this area. The use of the table is also a nice touch to the page and I like the picture used for E50-55. However, it could help to have another column with pictures for each row. That would help with the understanding of the text. For the anatomy of the cerebral cortex, it seems a little messy and hard to read as it is too point form. Perhaps these could be phrased into proper sentences with certain parts placed into bullet points to make it easier to read. Also, with the anatomy, pictures would be very helpful to aid in the explanation. For the functions of the cerebral cortex, it lists the functional areas but not the functions of those areas. Although it is stated in the video, which is a nice addition to the page, this could be improved by adding short sentences that state these functions that were mentioned as well. For Sections 1.4 and 1.5, references are also needed to state where the information was obtained from. The abnormalities section provides detailed explanations of the various disorders associated with the development of the cerebral cortex. There is also a good amount of pictures used. One thing I noticed was the references which was placed on the top of the section instead of throughout the text. | Overall I find the information provided to be concise and easy to understand. The introduction was great in giving us a brief overview of page. The layout of the early development of the brain and the development of the cerebral cortex was really nice. I like the use of bullet points as this makes it easier to read. Also good amount of referencing is seen in this area. The use of the table is also a nice touch to the page and I like the picture used for E50-55. However, it could help to have another column with pictures for each row. That would help with the understanding of the text. For the anatomy of the cerebral cortex, it seems a little messy and hard to read as it is too point form. Perhaps these could be phrased into proper sentences with certain parts placed into bullet points to make it easier to read. Also, with the anatomy, pictures would be very helpful to aid in the explanation. For the functions of the cerebral cortex, it lists the functional areas but not the functions of those areas. Although it is stated in the video, which is a nice addition to the page, this could be improved by adding short sentences that state these functions that were mentioned as well. For Sections 1.4 and 1.5, references are also needed to state where the information was obtained from. The abnormalities section provides detailed explanations of the various disorders associated with the development of the cerebral cortex. There is also a good amount of pictures used. One thing I noticed was the references which was placed on the top of the section instead of throughout the text. | ||
===Group 2- Kidney=== | |||
This wikipage is easy to read and the details provided was informative. The amount of text in each section was just nice and wasnt too overwhelming or insufficient, which was good. Overall, I noticed that the references could be improved. Instead of adding the link at the bottom, the team should use the code to reference such as in the section "Nephron development". Although the use of photos were really helpful and the choice of photos were great in the context they were added in, they were generally inconsistent in either description, reference or copyright information, which should be added to all photos. The anatomical position and kidney structure had clear and concise information and was easily understandable. The timeline of kidney embryology was really nice and I like how it was all 1-2 sentences long, making it really readable. In the section of developmental abnormalities, there is a large amount of text in the beginning that doesnt belong to any abnormality. Perhaps a subheading "Congenital Abnormalities of the Kidney and Urinary Tract" could be added to make it clearer as to what the text is about. Good use of image in each abnormalities though. The article appears to be unfinished but I'm assuming the team will be completing it after this peer review. To sum up, I like the readability of this wikipage and the images chosen, however, referencing and image descriptions could be further looked at for an even better page! | |||
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Revision as of 21:31, 10 October 2017
Peer Reviews
Group 1- Cerebral Cortex
Overall I find the information provided to be concise and easy to understand. The introduction was great in giving us a brief overview of page. The layout of the early development of the brain and the development of the cerebral cortex was really nice. I like the use of bullet points as this makes it easier to read. Also good amount of referencing is seen in this area. The use of the table is also a nice touch to the page and I like the picture used for E50-55. However, it could help to have another column with pictures for each row. That would help with the understanding of the text. For the anatomy of the cerebral cortex, it seems a little messy and hard to read as it is too point form. Perhaps these could be phrased into proper sentences with certain parts placed into bullet points to make it easier to read. Also, with the anatomy, pictures would be very helpful to aid in the explanation. For the functions of the cerebral cortex, it lists the functional areas but not the functions of those areas. Although it is stated in the video, which is a nice addition to the page, this could be improved by adding short sentences that state these functions that were mentioned as well. For Sections 1.4 and 1.5, references are also needed to state where the information was obtained from. The abnormalities section provides detailed explanations of the various disorders associated with the development of the cerebral cortex. There is also a good amount of pictures used. One thing I noticed was the references which was placed on the top of the section instead of throughout the text.
Group 2- Kidney
This wikipage is easy to read and the details provided was informative. The amount of text in each section was just nice and wasnt too overwhelming or insufficient, which was good. Overall, I noticed that the references could be improved. Instead of adding the link at the bottom, the team should use the code to reference such as in the section "Nephron development". Although the use of photos were really helpful and the choice of photos were great in the context they were added in, they were generally inconsistent in either description, reference or copyright information, which should be added to all photos. The anatomical position and kidney structure had clear and concise information and was easily understandable. The timeline of kidney embryology was really nice and I like how it was all 1-2 sentences long, making it really readable. In the section of developmental abnormalities, there is a large amount of text in the beginning that doesnt belong to any abnormality. Perhaps a subheading "Congenital Abnormalities of the Kidney and Urinary Tract" could be added to make it clearer as to what the text is about. Good use of image in each abnormalities though. The article appears to be unfinished but I'm assuming the team will be completing it after this peer review. To sum up, I like the readability of this wikipage and the images chosen, however, referencing and image descriptions could be further looked at for an even better page!
