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Z5117343 16:47, 10 August 2017 (AEST)
Peer Reviews
Group 1: CEREBRAL CORTEX The chosen headings for the development of the cerebral cortex were very suitable to highlight the key topics in providing a page of summarised information. It was then easy to navigate through the page using the shortcuts and finding information. Although, there was one sub sub heading “Timeline of Corticogenesis” that was formatted to be in bold while the rest were not.
The disorders listed seems to be really interesting and it covers the whole spectrum of the case abnormalities. But I suggest to get rid of the letter bullets (e.g. A), B), C) ) for the breakdown of the abnormalities.
The introduction had a quick and concise text, however, an image of the cerebellum would be suitable in this section on the side. While the sub sub heading stated that the introduction section will talk about the features of a cerebellum, a paragraph about the development and its stages were written down in this section as well. This could be moved into the ‘Early Development of the Brain’ subheading underneath. Bullet points of the brain layers as well as a diagram would be helpful for the visualisation of the brain.
For the sections that explain the development in specific weeks, a table would be advisable to make it neater and easier to look at. Also, an image was left inside the table grids and it was confusing whether it was meant to be there or not. Perhaps adding a photo gallery showing the stages at the bottom of the table would be better.
Hand drawn diagrams were really precise, neat and was very visually appealing. It was taking up all the space and unless it is intentional, I suggest to resize the drawing into a smaller one that fits the page as well as the accompanying text and content of the drawing.
The variety of visual aids were really entertaining and were referenced properly.
Finally, the reference list at the bottom of the page did not have a consistent format. It was mostly APA format however the others looked like a different format.
Group 2: KIDNEY
This page is really impressive for its organisation and balanced ratio of texts to images. There is a nice structure and flow in each different sections, this caught my attention and I read through most of the sections without any problems. All of the images were also labelled appropriately, the key words were formatted in bold and certain definitions were stated. These all helped in keeping the page really interesting and organised. A list of abnormalities and its causes were also stated in a very neat and informative matter with bullet points and images. It was nice to see that the research question was relevant and thought provoking.
Some paragraphs were not referenced especially the first paragraphs in each section. In-text citations should be changed into superscripts in some sections. This page contained really visually appealing images however, some images were not referenced and/or it didn't state the copyright message that states it can be reused with no issues. Some of the headings (e.g. 'Stages in nephron formation' and 'Common congenital kidney defects') were in an italics format, this could be changed into another sub-sub heading or maybe increase its font size. Blood supply section should be reviewed, summarised and referenced appropriately.
Information about the kidney development were mostly sourced from reputable journals articles that was published quite recently. However, the reference list section should be reviewed to keep the referencing format consistent. At the moment, it has APA format and some have different format I am not familiar with.
Group 3: HEART
Group 5: LUNG
Group 6: CEREBELLUM
Search Databases
Embryo Search
Embryo
Notochord Search
Notochord
Salmon Reference
<pubmed>28786202</pubmed>
Referenced Images
Chicken embryo E-cadherin and P-cadherin in gastrulation[1]
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Student Page
2017 Group Project 4
References
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