|2017 Project Groups|
|Group 1||Group 2||Group 3||Group 4||Group 5||Group 6|
|Mark Hill - Lab 1 page|
Here is the Student Page demonstration page I showed in the Practical class.
Use this page to practice editing and don't forget to add a topic to the 2017 Group Project 6 page.
The group discussion
The most obvious flaw was the lack of polish in formatting of some of the page. Bullet points are only so useful when it comes to writing a wiki page, instead of taking notes. The page is unfinished, but, the content included especially in the "Development of Cerebral Cortex" and "Abnormalities associated with Cerebral Cortex Development" was extensive and well done. The large table that linked the development with the time period was very useful and the choice of bolding key words allowed the main idea in the paragraph to be quickly understood from a glance. The use of images very much enhanced the descriptions and checker-like the layout of the different abnormalities was refreshing. Some subheadings, such as the Anatomy and Function of the cerebral cortex, could be elaborated on but the overall structure of the page is logical and fluid, and the writing is clear and concise without being superficial.
The introduction is clear and well-thought-out; simple enough that the layman can understand but comprehensive enough to lead logically into the more extensive information on the page. Perhaps a discussion of the kidney's function ought to be included with the description of kidney structure. Kidney development; the choice of that particular style of formatting runs a risk of not tying the development with the timeline but the small table at the top serves well to stop that, even if it is a little of a hassle moving back and forth to keep up. The content was well-written and appropriate in voice and depth of knowledge. Visually well-presented with figures appropriately explained. Developmental abnormalities were covered well, and although bullet points may not be the best way to present the information, it allowed for the key points to be understood very quickly and effectively. The transition from topic to topic was logical and flowed appropriately. Some aspects of the page must of course be filled out but overall a well-rounded, well-structured and informative page. Well done.
Overall a very in-depth page with most of the required subjects covered. Some general notes; the figures would have benefited from appropriate captions but were helpful nonetheless. Referencing and overall visual formatting could be improved. The page is written well and enjoyable to read. "Primary heart field and heart tube formation" could benefit from a diagram or figure since it is a lot of text that could be hard to conceptualise. The signalling processes are explained very well and in deep detail. Just a note though; the addressing of so many different variables in the signalling is a little confusing and hard to follow. Perhaps a more condensed response might be a little more straightforward. The diagram of the signalling pathways under "Wnt Signalling" was likewise hard to follow, and no key was given. Current Research and Animal Models were covered well and the explanation for their research and the key results highlighted were fascinating. Abnormal development was likewise addressed very well and the glossary of terms was very much appreciated.
The "Anatomy of the eye" was addressed very well, and the figures were very useful. However, significant aspects discussed in the Anatomy section were not present in the figures and could leave readers confused, for example, when all the muscles responsible for ocular movement were listed but not illustrated; there would be no need to list the proper names of all the muscles. Other than that the section was written well, merging description of form with explanation of function. The tables used in "Eye Development" were also gratifyingly direct, although some elaboration could improve the notes. From what is completed in the development of the "Components" the writing is engaging and the content is appropriately thorough. A diagram or figure would add to the good content. Congenital anomalies are a little brief but the images and table worked well in terms of formatting and visual appeal. Overall good job, would have appreciated a little more completion.