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| Mark Hill - Lab 1 page | |||||
Peer review feedback
Cerebral cortex
- Introduction
- Could have been linked together with anatomy and function for better structuring of page
- Simple diagram could have been used to provide context on body location
- Development of the cerebral cortex
- Section should be expanded upon to give context to the content
- Seemed like a sudden introduction of neuronal classes and key developmental zones without much expansion
- Section seemed to be more about components of the developing cerebral cortex rather than development itself – could update subheading to reflect this or update content to focus more on development
- Section should be expanded upon to give context to the content
- Timeline of corticogenesis
- Could have been its own subheading
- Anatomy
- Should be moved up towards start of the page with introduction
- Functions
- Should be moved up towards start of page with introduction
- Functional areas should be expanded upon to briefly discuss their different roles
- Should not rely too much on linked video
- Abnormalities
- Diagram “disorders of cortical formation” gave little information relating to section – seemed like illustration related little to the mentioned stages. Instead, could have mentioned that abnormalities arise during proliferation, migration and organisation during cortical development
- Lettering and numbering of subheadings in this section should be switched for clarity
- Overall was well done. However:
- Some diagrams lacked descriptions and figure legends/abbreviation definitions – diagrams should be self-explanatory and be understandable in combination with their descriptions, when taken out of their contexts within the page
- Minor grammatical errors present throughout the page
- Mostly well-structured but some subheadings can be shifted around - see above for specific feedback
