Talk:2017 Group Project 2
|Student Projects: 1 Cerebral Cortex | 2 Kidney | 3 Heart | 4 Eye | 5 Lung | 6 Cerebellum|
|Student Page - here is the sample page I demonstrated with in the first labs.I remind all students that you have your own Group Forum on Moodle for your discussions, it is only accessible by members of your group.|
I have now added a discussion Forum for your group to Moodle. You can add your discussion here (available to everyone) or in your Moodle Group Discussion (available to only your group members).
The collapsible table below shows the assessment criteria that will be used for this group project.
About the Discussion Page
This should be considered as the "other side" of the project page. It is an area where you can:
- Assemble resources.
- Add useful links.
- Discuss your project with team members. (Please do not use student names on any page on this Wiki)
- Paste your Peer Assessments. (Added anonymously, do not identify yourself)
BMC Dev Biol Search: Renal Development
Cynthia here, I don't want to do the brain lol. I don't mind anything else though
This page is very informative and easy to read. I like the way it begins with the anatomy of the kidney in the developed human, and then progresses through its embryological development. The inclusion of developmental timeline table aids the flow of the page. Images are well integrated into the page with informative descriptions, however are not correctly referenced and do include the suitable Copyright statement or Student Image Template.
The 'stages of nephron development' subheading includes numbered bullet points, but would appear more finished by using the Wiki bullet points. In the "Genes expressed" section it would be beneficial if the terms RET and GDNF were expanded on. The 'Blood Supply' section is clearly unfinished, but will require in text citations and images would help it to read easier. The page references well, but many sections are still unfinished. The page would benefit from a glossary at the end, and the "General info on the renal system" section should be included higher up on the page, or integrated into one of the other sections such as under the "Kidney" heading. This page is very easy to read, but still needs some work.
References should be cited correctly, i.e. don’t leave the links in the paragraphs and use proper citation. The images used should include references, copyright statements as well as the Student Image template required. If there are copyright images the team could be innovative and use their own diagrams to display structures. Use references for the ‘Timeline of Kidney Embryology’ to show that a variety of sources were used to complete the table. Current Research and Future Questions subheading is incomplete. Glossary of terms could be used to explain certain words, for example explaining in simple terms what GDNF and RET are.
Subheadings and content that have been used show a good understanding of the topic area. The team has bolded important words in relation to the kidney structure. The team has also placed a description under the images which allows readers to understand what the image is showing. The use of a table of ‘Timeline of Kidney’ allows readers to understand the content of the wikipage easily (maybe add images to the table). The team has shown comprehensive research; however, they need to show more referencing of sources to display the research that they have done.
Overall this seems like a very well put together project and is very informative and easy to follow, and enjoyable to read. There is an appropriate balance of both text and visual diagrams, which greatly helped my understanding of the development of the kidneys. Figure 4 appears to be missing a reference. I do think perhaps an animation to explain nephron development may add additional clarity, and would provide another level of interaction for the reader. Perhaps also think about adding a student drawn diagram. The table is a great way to display the developmental stages in an easy to read manner. The ‘blood supply’ section appears to be copy and paste which I assume will be rewritten? The section on current research is simply a list of PubMed links, and should be expanded to display content that is informative to the reader. Likewise, ‘questions for the future’ and ‘general info on the renal system’ remain as headings without any accompanying information. I think the questions for the future could be an interesting section, however general info I would think will have been covered elsewhere in the project. The topic has clearly been researched well, and is well referenced, with most references being from scientific papers. All in all I think this is a high quality project, that will only require a few additional tweaks to take it to the next level. ---
There is a lot of good information on this page and it is easy to read and understand. The table that introduces the developmental timetable of kidney development is a quick, clear way to introduce the topic. Bolding the anatomical structures is a good way to emphasize the key information of the kidney anatomy.
The information on the page is represented relatively clearly, but a couple of fixes could add clarity. In the description of the Mesonephric stage, the embryological feature, the nephrogenic chord is first introduced as the nephrogenic chord, then referred to as the nephrogenic duct in the next paragraph. Using the same words to describe the same feature makes it less confusing for the reader. Adding a picture to the “Blood Supply” section would also help visualize the kidney vasculature. There is some information about signalling factors in “Nephron Development” that seems oddly placed and may function better in the “Genes Expressed” section. In “Genes Expressed” there is an introduction of two genes, RET and GDNF. RET is clearly the focus of the section but more information about GDNF would benefit this section. Also, making clear what type of molecules RET and GDNF are (receptors, ligands, transcription factors, etc.) and explaining the mechanism of their interaction would make this section clearer.
There are a couple of subheadings at the end of the project that need information in them, pictures that need copyright information and summary when you click on them, in-text citations that need to be added, and basic spelling and grammatical mistakes, all of which can be fixed with some simple editing. The information is solid, the abnormalities section is very good, and the discussion of current research “Can kidney disease be associated with nephron number?” is a good way to end the project. Overall good project.
The page flows very well and is easy to read. However, there is incorrect citing or no citing at all for images and texts which can trigger copyright issues, in some sections (mostly the beginning) of the page. The structure and anatomical position is extremely easy to read and comprehend, as well as the use of a table for development. Id advise to insert more images for development and the remaining sections to help the reader visualise the process instead of being overwhelmed by the information. Developmental abnormalities seem to contain information not necessarily needed. Maybe add the 5 paragraphs above "Kidney developmental abnormalities are diverse and they correspond to defects at different stages of kidney development" statement in a separate research topic. Good use of images for abnormalities though. Overall, the page is quite informative and has been researched effectively. It could be improved by slight tweaks in format aforementioned and correct referencing.
Structure and use of headings is clear and very easy to follow with a good flow. There is good implementation of labelled diagrams all throughout in sections where they are needed which is not only visually appealing, but also well balanced in regards to the amount of text included. References are not included with most of the images; also, whereas some areas are well referenced with in-text citations, other sections lack any form of references. The information is easy to read and understand due to its conciseness and use of numbering as well as shortened paragraphs. However, the initial introduction lacks a cohesive essence as the second sentence on the placenta seems out of place and unrelated to the first sentence. Also in the introduction, the references need to be entered in appropriately as the links aren’t in the form of in text references. Good use of questions as subheadings under “Current Research” as it provides an overview of the topic and peaks the curiosity of the reader – also adding to the enjoyment and ease of reading the research. Overall, well-structured page which is easy to read and is well-organised.
I found the introduction to the kidney didn't flow very nicely and each sentence and paragraph were just points added in. Also, the grammar and punctuation in the introduction paragraph needs to be edited. The final thing that needs to be altered in the introduction paragraph is the links that have just been placed in. I'm not sure if they are the references but if so they need to be referenced correctly. The anatomical position and kidney structure are written really well! The only improvement I could make is with figure one and two reference them within the writing e.g. "Their inner structure can be divided into 2 main areas: the outer cortex, and the inner medulla, as illustrated in Figure 2", otherwise this section is really great. The timeline of the kidney embryology is good - basic outline which makes it easy to follow such a complex process. To make the page flow in a more succinct manner I think it would be good to put the kidney timeline under the kidney development heading instead of separating the two as the kidney development information expands on the timeline really well. The kidney development information is really good, and I think the images really complete it. However, the link at the end of nephrogenesis needs to be referenced correctly with intext. Also under blood supply, it says "THIS IS COPY AND PASTE" so I'm not sure if that's copied off another page or your own notes but that needs to be fixed. The abnormality section was really good and current research is a really interesting thing to include, that section just needs some more information which I'm sure you guys are already on top of! Overall its a really great page, good effort.
I believe the headings chosen cover a sufficient amount of points you need in order to describe kidney development! Referencing needs to be changed, its easy to use the code on the wiki cheat sheet and that automatically makes a reference for you! When describing position, explain what retroperitoneal means, its not commonly known and also Thoracic 12 (T12) so people know what T12 refers too. For images, you need to find the copyright information and reference them properly, Mark has step by step instructions on what needs to be included in the image description. There aren’t many references in the first section of the page, it would benefit if you included some. Under nephrogenesis, point 3, you can find the articles pubmed ID and add the reference in that way instead of manually doing it. For developmental abnormalities, I feel like this could be explained better, it gets technical straight away and this can become quite confusing. Current research and questions need to be worked on but I’m sure that’s whats intended. Overall I think the content on this page is very relevant to kidney development and it was interesting to read. The two major things you should fix are image copyright and references and intext referencing.
The introduction was a clear overview of the kidney, its main parts and its role. The connection to embryological development is great because it ties in with the rest of the page. The only note here is that the references need to be properly referenced, not just pasted with the link. The anatomical position and kidney structure parts were good because there wasn’t too much text and it only served to complement the diagrams. This is a good section to put before kidney embryology as we can understand what is developing as the embryo grows. The timeline of kidney embryology was very brief. This is not bad considering you go into kidney development in more detail in the next section. However, I think another column for images would be worthwhile for the reader to visualise each stage or week of development. Again, there are a few referencing errors that I’m sure you’ll rectify soon. There is a good use of references in nephron development. You’ve also clearly noted the copy and paste of the blood supply section. For this part, I would strongly recommend some diagrams because vasculature can be quite complicated to understand with just text. The subheading, “Developmental abnormalities”, had a good chunk of research at the beginning that gave an overview of types of abnormalities before exploring three in detail. There was also a good amount of referencing. Clearly, the current research subheading is underdeveloped but there seems to be many articles that you will explore. The reference list will be more reflective of your research once you fix some of those referencing errors.
Good project page that goes through almost everything required for the page – the Current Research and Future questions section is lacking context though. The project is well written and easy to understand. Some sections have a better layout than others, so maybe you can work on making the same layout for the whole page. Some sections also have the wrong formatting of references, but other sections have perfect formatting. You must be careful with copy-pasting (Blood supply section) text into your project page without giving a reference from where you copy pasted the text from. Some of the pictures on the page also need more information on the image page itself like copyright information. It is good that you have added figure number to your pictures and a little description of it – this helps the reader to understand the context.
- The introduction to the Kidney is a really good, informative section. You need to change the format of your references in this section though. The layout might be a little bit confusing since there is a title “Kidney Structure” is in the middle of the page due to the pictures on each site.
- Nephron development and The developmental Abnormalities: These sections have a different layout compared to the earlier sections. It’s a lot of text, so try to make it look a bit more comfortable for the reader to go through. Maybe you can try to make the layout similar to some of the other sections and give the page a better flow.
--- This page presents nicely and very easy to read. In the introduction section, instead of pasting those references, put them in pubmed reference properly so they can be put automatically into the references. They have introduced good and enough information on the anatomy of the kidney. It was not fully referenced in the kidney development section but it was well written in this section with informative pictures and figures. It could be easier to direct the text to its picture accordingly. The timeline would be more beneficial if pictures were included. Nice and shot subheadings. In the abnormalities section, brief paragraphs with well-referenced starting off nicely. Pictures and texts are presented fairly good and are easy to see without a mess, but some of the terms were hard to understand e.g."when the left and right kidneys fuse at their lower poles by a parenchymal isthmus located ventral to the abdominal aorta, forming a "U" shape", maybe have a glossary section at the end of the page. A lot of references in this section is a bonus indicating it was researched well. In the current research section, majority is a list of article links which I assume they are not yet touched on at this state, which is ok. But make sure to have 2-3 journal articles in this section. A few of future question along the way if you have any would be great. Overall, it is a nice written page, looking forward to see this as a whole!
This wikipage is easy to read and the details provided was informative. The amount of text in each section was just nice and wasnt too overwhelming or insufficient, which was good. Overall, I noticed that the references could be improved. Instead of adding the link at the bottom, the team should use the code to reference such as in the section "Nephron development". Although the use of photos were really helpful and the choice of photos were great in the context they were added in, they were generally inconsistent in either description, reference or copyright information, which should be added to all photos. The anatomical position and kidney structure had clear and concise information and was easily understandable. The timeline of kidney embryology was really nice and I like how it was all 1-2 sentences long, making it really readable. In the section of developmental abnormalities, there is a large amount of text in the beginning that doesnt belong to any abnormality. Perhaps a subheading "Congenital Abnormalities of the Kidney and Urinary Tract" could be added to make it clearer as to what the text is about. Good use of image in each abnormalities though. The article appears to be unfinished but I'm assuming the team will be completing it after this peer review. To sum up, I like the readability of this wikipage and the images chosen, however, referencing and image descriptions could be further looked at for an even better page!
Overall, this project page is easy to read. Most of the information provided is very concise and specific. For the anatomical position and kidney structure, do remember to add in the references in the text. Before using the short form, do include the full name. For example Thoracic 12 (T12) instead of T12. I really appreciate the timeline of development table as it provides a brief overview before moving onto the details. The section of kidney development is well done with good subheadings to help with the flow of the content. However, more images or videos can be included for better understanding. Again, for the “nephrogenesis” and “ascension” and “genes expressed” section, its lacking references. For the developmental abnormalities, maybe a subheading could be used to categorise the first few paragraphs of information as it was hard to understand the flow of the content. Since it was mentioned that “there are defects in different stages of kidney development”, the team could use this as a basis in arranging the information. Perhaps, the team could assign one abnormality for each stage of the kidney development. I think that would help the section have a better flow. The team have also stated that the information for blood supply and current research is still ongoing. For the images, some images are lacking referencing, the copyright statement and also a brief description explaining the image. This team has kept their page simple and easy to understand. With a few more added information and slight tweaks, It would be a really good page.
This page is really impressive for its organisation and balanced ratio of texts to images. There is a nice structure and flow in each different sections, this caught my attention and I read through most of the sections without any problems. All of the images were also labelled appropriately, the key words were formatted in bold and certain definitions were stated. These all helped in keeping the page really interesting and organised. A list of abnormalities and its causes were also stated in a very neat and informative matter with bullet points and images. It was nice to see that the research question was relevant and thought provoking.
Some paragraphs were not referenced especially the first paragraphs in each section. In-text citations should be changed into superscripts in some sections. This page contained really visually appealing images however, some images were not referenced and/or it didn't state the copyright message that states it can be reused with no issues. Some of the headings (e.g. 'Stages in nephron formation' and 'Common congenital kidney defects') were in an italics format, this could be changed into another sub-sub heading or maybe increase its font size. Blood supply section should be reviewed, summarised and referenced appropriately.
Information about the kidney development were mostly sourced from reputable journals articles that was published quite recently. However, the reference list section should be reviewed to keep the referencing format consistent. At the moment, it has APA format and some have different format I am not familiar with.
The layout of this webpage is extremely clear and engaging. The use of diagrams and tables makes the page more appealing to read. I like how the diagrams are split between the left and right sides of the page, the symmetry makes the project aesthetically pleasing. I also think the use of headings and subheadings makes the page well structured and easy to follow. All the material seems to be relevant and informative. The information and diagrams seem to be well referenced. I think that some paragraphs such as bloody supply and developmental abnormalities need to be broken up as the one large paragraph of text is not appealing to read, however this is understandable as the project is not completed yet. Incorporating diagrams, YouTube videos or perhaps collapsible windows in these sections could be beneficial. Another suggestion for this page would be to make the overall title of ‘Kidney’ larger and clearer, perhaps include a diagram of the kidney with the title to make it more attractive.
Organization of the page is done really well, especially for Nephrogenesis and the different stages involved. There is a lot of good detail in each section, specifically the abnormalities section (it may help to break down the introduction of the abnormalities with an image however). The subheadings included show a good knowledge of the topic and guide the reader through kidney development. Good support of ideas using helpful images and timeline table of kidney development. I think the page would be more complete if the current research, questions for the future, and general info on the renal system were complete. Also, it may make more sense to put general information at the beginning to orient the reader (depending on what the “general info” entails). Some animal models and examples of signals involved in the “Genes Expressed” section would also help complete the page. For the images, there should be copyright information added, a description of the image, and the proper reference.
This peer review is based on the relevant dot points of the ‘Group Assessment Criteria’, as well as subheadings suggested by Mark. This information can be found on the student page.
|1. The choice of content shows a good understanding of the topic area||The embryology timeline is well written and very informative. It gives the reader a general understanding of the process of kidney development before each stage of development is covered in detail.
The topic of ‘kidney development’ is described clearly and in detail. The well-structured subheadings make this section of the wiki page easier to follow. The chosen figures also enhance the information presented, and facilitate the readers understanding.
The brief introduction to the anatomy of the kidney provides a nice introduction to the topic, and helps the reader understand the basics.
|The wiki page is missing several important areas of information:
Even though some information regarding signalling processes has been integrated into the 'kidney development’ section, the wiki page may benefit from a section entirely dedicated to signalling processes (this is one of Mark’s recommended sub-headings)
There is currently very little information regarding current research on the wiki page – this section needs some work.
Although the heading “future questions” has been added to the wiki page, there is no information associated with it.
|2. Content is correctly cited and referenced||There have been attempts at referencing throughout the assignment. A reference list has been produced and appears mostly correct. References have not been repeated throughout the list.
The reference list is comprised mainly of peer-reviewed primary research articles.
Some images have been referenced correctly – see ‘figure 3’.
|Overall, referencing throughout the wiki page is poor. Some sections completely lack referencing (see ‘kidney structure’, ‘genes expressed’). Other sections have only 1 link attached to them (see ‘nephrogenesis’). Any information that is not original (in idea or structure) needs proper sentence-by-sentence citations. The most well-referenced section is the introduction to ‘developmental abnormalities’, and that still contains some uncited material.
Try not to rely on only one source of information per section (see ‘nephrogenesis’). Try to find a variety of research articles to source your material from. This will increase the quality and reliability of the information in the wiki page.
Many of the images have been cited incorrectly and used without permission (see ‘figure 1’ and ‘figure 2’) Remember to include the full reference, the original summary and the copyright license information for each image.
|3. The wiki has an element of teaching at a peer level||The information presented is mostly at a level appropriate for peers. Some background information has been provided to aid in the reader’s understanding.
The chosen visual aids make some of the more complex ideas easier to comprehend (see ‘figure 3’). Some of the images also contain helpful descriptions that aid in understanding of the material (see ‘figure 3’ and ‘figure 8’)
|Many of the acronyms and terms used in this assignment are either poorly explained, or not explained at all. By including a glossary, the reader will be able to understand some of the more difficult subject areas.
No student-drawn diagrams have been included in the wiki page. Try to include some hand-drawn images, as well as other devices (e.g. tables, analogies) to aid the reader.
|4. Relates the topic and content of the Wiki entry to learning aims of embryology||The ‘Kidney development’ section was well-structured and was covered in great detail.
Developmental signaling processes were addressed, which is another important learning aim of embryology.
Current research regarding kidney development has been mentioned.
|There has been no discussion of key discoveries regarding kidney development.
Although a thorough understanding of certain topics areas has been demonstrated, certain areas (such as current research) still need improvement.
|5. The content of the wiki should demonstrate to the reader that your group has researched adequately on this topic||Certain aspects have been well researched such as anatomy of the kidney, kidney development and developmental abnormalities.||No links to other pages on the UNSW embryology wiki have been included. Try linking this wiki page to other aspects of the embryology wiki.
The small number of sources cited in the reference list demonstrates a poor and narrow approach to researching this topic. A greater library of sources should be used to develop this page (mainly primary research articles).
• The wiki page appears to explore a variety of topics regarding the development of the kidney, ranging from topics such as nephrogenesis, ascension of the kidneys, the importance of gene expression in kidney development and also abnormalities associated with development. Furthermore, all topics are relevant to kidney development (criteria 1). In addition a variety of images and tables have been utilized alongside the written-text (criteria 2). This helps present information to students who prefer to learn visually.
• Within the wiki page, a broad variety of references have been included, all of which appear to be recent. All sources included appear to be correctly cited and referenced in-text, thus the authors of the page have clearly satisfied criteria 3.
• It was also great how the authors have not only discussed abnormalities associated with development, but have also investigated current research being conducted into this particular area of embryonic development. Thus, the authors are on track to fulfilling criteria 5 of the assessment. A possible area to investigate may be to examine whether certain abnormalities may be treated through the application of stem cell therapy for example.
Areas of improvement:
• The authors may wish to include videos which may help reinforce information presented within the wiki page. Videos may revolve around the stages of development of the kidney and may appeal to peers who prefer a learning style focused on visual explanation of concepts (criteria 4).
• The authors may also explore research previously conducted into this field which has allowed our understanding of renal development to grow. Thus authors may include a timeline showing discoveries over the years which have contributed to our understanding.
• The topic labelled “blood supply” should also include images to perhaps show the vascular map of arteries and veins which branch out towards the kidney.
• Authors may also wish to create a subheading titled “signaling” in order to describe the signaling processes involved in renal development. Another key improvement would be for the authors to provide a more detailed description of the genes involved in renal development, very few genes have been listed under this subheading.
General Comment: Most of the sections on the page have been done well, but some areas still need improvement.