Talk:2014 Group Project 5

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Group Assessment Criteria
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  1. The key points relating to the topic that your group allocated are clearly described.
  2. The choice of content, headings and sub-headings, diagrams, tables, graphs show a good understanding of the topic area.
  3. Content is correctly cited and referenced.
  4. The wiki has an element of teaching at a peer level using the student's own innovative diagrams, tables or figures and/or using interesting examples or explanations.
  5. Evidence of significant research relating to basic and applied sciences that goes beyond the formal teaching activities.
  6. Relates the topic and content of the Wiki entry to learning aims of embryology.
  7. Clearly reflects on editing/feedback from group peers and articulates how the Wiki could be improved (or not) based on peer comments/feedback. Demonstrates an ability to review own work when criticised in an open edited wiki format. Reflects on what was learned from the process of editing a peer's wiki.
  8. Evaluates own performance and that of group peers to give a rounded summary of this wiki process in terms of group effort and achievement.
  9. The content of the wiki should demonstrate to the reader that your group has researched adequately on this topic and covered the key areas necessary to inform your peers in their learning.
  10. Develops and edits the wiki entries in accordance with the above guidelines.
Uploading Images
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  1. Open the left hand menu item “Toolbox” and click “Upload file” and a new window will open.
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  3. The window will now show the file name in the “Source filename” window.
  4. You can then rename the uploaded file in the “Destination filename” window.
    1. Make sure the new name accurately describes the image.
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Images not including the above information will be deleted by the course coordinator and be considered in the student assessment process.

Students cannot delete uploaded images. Contact the course coordinator with the file address.

Referencing
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All references used in making your project page should be cited where they appear in the text or images.

In page edit mode where XXXX is the PubMed ID number use the following code.

<ref name=”PMIDXXXX”><pubmed>XXXX</pubmed></ref>

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Plagiarism
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Currently all students originally assigned to each group are listed as equal authors/contributors to their project. If you have not contributed the content you had originally agreed to, nor participated in the group work process, then you should contact the course coordinator immediately and either discuss your contribution or request removal from the group author list. Remember that all student online contributions are recorded by date, time and the actual contributed content. A similar email reminder of this information was sent to all current students.

Please note the Universities Policy regarding Plagiarism

In particular this example:

"Claiming credit for a proportion of work contributed to a group assessment item that is greater than that actually contributed;"

Academic Misconduct carries penalties. If a student is found guilty of academic misconduct, the penalties include warnings, remedial educative action, being failed in an assignment or excluded from the University for two years.


Please also read Copyright Tutorial with regard to content that can be used in your project.

Project Analysis 24 Sep
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--Mark Hill (talk) 09:57, 24 September 2014 (EST) Individual student data for each group has also been analysed.

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--Mark Hill (talk) 09:57, 24 September 2014 (EST) I have masked student ID.

  • Individual students will know how much work you have been doing to date.
  • I will be contacting those student on 5 edits or below.

2014 Student Projects: Group 1 | Group 2 | Group 3 | Group 4 | Group 5 | Group 6 | Group 7 | Group 8


--Mark Hill (talk) 17:54, 31 October 2014 (EST) These student projects have now been finalised and undergoing final assessment.

Group Assessment Criteria
  1. The key points relating to the topic that your group allocated are clearly described.
  2. The choice of content, headings and sub-headings, diagrams, tables, graphs show a good understanding of the topic area.
  3. Content is correctly cited and referenced.
  4. The wiki has an element of teaching at a peer level using the student's own innovative diagrams, tables or figures and/or using interesting examples or explanations.
  5. Evidence of significant research relating to basic and applied sciences that goes beyond the formal teaching activities.
  6. Relates the topic and content of the Wiki entry to learning aims of embryology.
  7. Clearly reflects on editing/feedback from group peers and articulates how the Wiki could be improved (or not) based on peer comments/feedback. Demonstrates an ability to review own work when criticised in an open edited wiki format. Reflects on what was learned from the process of editing a peer's wiki.
  8. Evaluates own performance and that of group peers to give a rounded summary of this wiki process in terms of group effort and achievement.
  9. The content of the wiki should demonstrate to the reader that your group has researched adequately on this topic and covered the key areas necessary to inform your peers in their learning.
  10. Develops and edits the wiki entries in accordance with the above guidelines.

Peer Reviews

Group Project 5 – Integumentary Development

This page looks very neat and well organised, with an introduction that explains exactly what is going to appear and be discussed on the page. The Development Overview section is very well done, with the appropriate use of subheadings and content. The use of dot points is very effective, making the page look neater. Perhaps it would be good to draw a histological diagram of the skin layers, and uploading it to the skin development section. Specialised cells or important names throughout the page could be highlighted in bold or underlined as well, to highlight important terms and make it easier to learn and remember from. The title ‘Some Recent Findings’ accurately portrays what we as students can only do, which is identify SOME of the recent findings. This section could have more than 2 recent findings however and could be further subdivided by subheadings into the different components of the integumentary system – perhaps have 2-3 research articles for each component of the system. Historic findings are well researched but some more information would be good. The ‘Abnormalities’ section is so far the best looking section as it seems it is almost completed. Perhaps a few more abnormalities would be even better.

The table of the timeline in the ‘Development Overview’ section is superbly done and the use of histological images is fantastic as it provides the anatomical information visually. When I clicked on an image however, there was no proper referencing of the image and the copyright information and student image information was not present. The images are described very well. One image has a problem and is present in red writing, so might need to remove this as something is wrong with the file and it could not be uploaded. There are no student-drawn images and I think if this group did this, it would really benefit their project and emphasise their understanding.

The ‘Some Recent Findings’ section has a purple background, which makes the page look more aesthetically pleasing and less monochrome. I like the ‘More recent papers’ box that can be expanded to reveal any more research papers related to the integumentary fetal development, in case anyone wants to have a further read- very clever.

Journal articles are correctly referenced but website references need to be improved upon- to find how to do this go to the ‘How to reference’ page. References are all over the place and need to be compiled under each heading or one main heading titled ‘References’ at the bottom of the page.

Overall, this page is looking fantastic at this point in time so keep up the great work!


Introduction is short though luckily few words can go a long way, with all sections of the wiki page being properly addressed. Development overview content is good; the use of table integrated with pictures allows viewers to visually grasp the progression in skin and teeth development. The changing between dot-points and paragraph format should be standardized or use paragraphs with dot-point only for list based information. References need to be properly integrated into the page, instead of at the bottom of each section.

In the recent findings section 2 out of the 4 studies presented have any content. To improve cutting some of excess information for the 2 studies already addressed and creating summaries for the other 2 will create better scope of recent findings. The formatting of recent findings is unusual, proper placement of the “Hematoxylin/eosin” image”, removal of dot-point and removal of purple highlighting, will make the section easier for viewers to understand. Historical findings okay, more detail could be added to “skin”, “glands”, “nails”. Use of capital letters like “DEVELOPMENT” show be replaced with subheadings, the image “File:Screen Shot 2014-10-08 at 10.38.04 am.png” has not appeared properly, should be easy to fix.

Straight up the abnormalities section is amazing, no improvement needed. All 4 diseases have in-depth relevant information, sufficient referencing and images to allow viewers to visualise clinical manifestation. To improve use of dot-points or paragraphs should be standard throughout the project, referencing in beginning sections needs to compiled at ending of each Main heading or bottom of page, recent findings need 1-2 more studies, and recent findings need significant reformatting.


Overall I was very impressed with this project page. I loved your use of pictures and diagrams as it provided a great understanding of what was happening- and also, a lot of the images were quite interesting- which is a great thing for a project! I also enjoyed the use of bullet points- it was very to the point and it retained my attention throughout the piece. I did find, however, that the introduction was a bit short. Whilst it did cover most of what was required, I don’t think it hurts to be a bit more exhaustive in what you’re saying, because the introduction sets the mindset of the reader for the rest of the project- and if they have a clear understanding from the start, it makes it much easier when you are explaining more complex things such as the abnormalities later on.

Overall, I thought that the developmental timeline was extremely well done, and a highlight of your project. The rest of the developmental overview was quite well done, however I think in areas it was a bit sloppy, and it would be of great benefit to clear this up so as to improve the clarity of your work. Further, I enjoyed the succinctness of your paragraphs, it made it easy to read and wasn’t too much to take in at once. I think that currently, your use of colour is a bit random in the recent findings. I think that this could really boost your project if you applied it to more areas of the page. As far as the content goes, I think that the recent findings is just too wordy and I began to lose my concentration a bit. I think maybe by forming more succinct dot points- you will be able to convey your message more clearly.

I think the historic findings could do with a bit more beefing up, but what you have so far is well done. The abnormalities is also very well done, and I think that your use of images really grab the readers attention.

I think that overall this project is shaping up to be a great one. I think you need to be careful and consistent with your referencing though as I noticed some sections lacked in-text citations.


This page seems to be done extremely well. It looks very visually appealing as multiple images are used, information is presented in tables, bullet points and very few slabs of text. The introduction is short and to the point. You could possibly add to this area a tiny bit of info concerning the embryonic development of this system, where it first started, then mention how you will expand on the fetal development. Otherwise it just seems way too short.

Explanation of the organs in this system is well done and concise. In the glands section, I would suggest not using dot points for the function of the vernix caseosa as it looks as though the dot points continue from those of the glands, therefore can be confusing when first looked at. Other than that, I would suggest that you make sure your referencing is correct and is used within the text.

The recent findings area is nicely done, but I still can’t help but feel the amount of text is just too much, even though the section is made better looking by making it purple (keep the colour, it looks awesome). The slab of text is just too much, so you should try and simplify it a bit. Historic findings are few but there is at least one for every organ which is good (more would be better). The abnormalities covered are done well, going into detail and providing a good image to describe what it looks like. I would suggest having at least 5 abnormalities, one for each organ discussed.

Overall, this page is very well done, with lots of images and colour used. The main thing I would suggest would be to make sure correct referencing is used. There were some paragraphs were no references were used at all. Also, all references should be at the bottom of the page, not within individual sections.


This page has great overall structure and presentation. The introduction gives good insight of the overall contents of the page, however it is very brief and should be expanded upon.

The table included in the developmental overview serving, as a timeline is excellent, really well done. It’s easy to follow and looks very neat. I like how there is an image for each of the weeks mentioned, just don’t forget to add in-text citations for its contents. The glands sub-section is very brief and would benefit if there were more contents added. Great job on the images though. The nail section is the same, more contents needs to be added and image would look really good.

The developmental overview and historic findings sections also seems to lack in-text citations. There is also has an image with a broken link. The subsection hair seems to be well researched, however I would also suggest either bolding or underlining the words you want to emphasize such as “structure” for a neater look.

The recent findings section looks superb I love the purple background colour. Its very well researched and the link to more research papers are very helpful for readers. I would suggest you put the image at the bottom of the mentioned content though, just to avoid the big gap on the page, or even if you can manage to wrap the text around the image, it would look much better in terms of presentation.

Although disturbing, the abnormalities section I could not fault. Very well done. It is evident that it has been research well and the images allow for great visualization of the diseases mentioned.

Overall, excellent page just needs a very formatting edits and some expanded contents mentioned above. Good luck!


This is a really well done project. You have made sure that that you have ticked all the boxes as well that Mark has asked for. The abnormalities section is really good. You have done well with most of your images as when you click on them there is a good description and they are well referenced. The development overview table is exceptional and makes the project easy to understand. For the week 22 maybe include the study in which you got your information from.

Apart from the abnormalities section it appears as though the referencing is a bit all over the place. Need to follow the abnormalities section and put references into the specific parts of the information you are using it for. Because otherwise it becomes difficult to know exactly where you got your information from. The historic findings are really good and well done however there is probably a space for more information to be included as I feel as though some of the findings are a bit hard to follow at times. It may have just been my computer I couldn’t see the picture of ‘fetal hair development’.

I think it would give a nice touch to the project if you were to add some student images because it would give the page a more ‘student’ and also make it easier to understand. Don’t mind the purple background on the ‘some recent findings’ part but it just looks a bit out of the blue. It’s certainly unique and attracts the eye but it puts a lot of emphasis on this section which I’m not entirely sure you want.

Overall though a really good project with excellent information. There needs to be a bit more focus on referencing technique, some minor edits which I have mentioned and maybe introduce some student pictures to make the project more student-like. Great work though and good luck in finishing it off.


The introduction of this page was good as it provided a great overview and insight into what the project would later go on to discuss. Perhaps a little information on defining the integumentary system itself would be valuable though, to let the reader know the constituents.

The sub-sectioning of the page’s content into ‘introduction, ‘development overview’, ‘recent findings’, ‘historic findings’ and ‘abnormalities’ was clever, as the development section then went on to describe each component such as skin, nails etc. This effectively segmented the information into smaller chunks that could easily be navigated to. I especially liked the use of the table in the ‘skin’ section, showing the week of development, description and image corresponding alongside it, as it provided a holistic approach to that section. However, there were no in-text citations in the ‘skin’, ‘hair’, ‘nail’ or ‘teeth’ sections, hence the source of the information is unclear. To do this correctly, Dr Hill’s Wiki help page should be consulted.

The use of various images with labelled captions was a strength of this project, as the pictures were effective in balancing the text components to make the page more visually appealing. Most of the sections under ‘development overview’ have a decent amount of content, however the ‘nails’ part is a bit lacking and also needs to be correctly cited. The use of the table of images alongside the description of developmental stage in the ‘teeth’ section was very good to include, however the image is captioned ‘The stages of embryonic teeth development’. This may be irrelevant as the project’s focus is on fetal development. Further research into this area may uncover more relevant information.

Although the section on ‘recent findings’ contains a lot of information, the use of chunky paragraphs detracts from the readability of the page and the purple boxes could be summarised into dot points to help the reader understand the content more quickly. The section on historic findings seems concise and relevant, however the image included says it has been removed/deleted, so this requires editing. Lastly, the ‘abnormalities’ section was very well-structured and written, as each example had a captioned image accompanying it to help the reader visualise. This section was also well-done in terms of in-text citations, with an extensive reference list provided at the end. Perhaps consider adding some student-drawn images and possibly a relevant video, but otherwise it is very good as it is. Overall, the project has a good layout and a decent amount of content; with some editing and formatting it can be improved further.


Overall this is an impressive and well researched wiki page incorporating lots of pictures and tables to keep the reader engaged and interested. However there are a few areas that have the potential to be tweaked. Firstly there are references scattered throughout the page. A more attractive way of presenting the references is as a long list at the end of the page. The introduction is clear, concise and short. All the organ development section is well presented and has the right amount of information. It is well structured in the sense that the student introduces the organ, it’s embryonic origin, the fetal growth stage and then goes into slightly more depth in a bullet point form. Along with complementary pictures, this is a very effective way of presenting their topic. This page could be improved by adding student-drawn schematic diagrams to summarise the layers of the skin in particular since histological images can be confusing and unclear to a non-expert embryology student.

The skin development section appears to dwell on the content that was covered in lectures. Considering there appears to be only three references associated with the entire integumentary organ development section, the depth of the information is limited. By doing some more research you might be able to find interesting additional information that can be added. The recent findings section is interesting and the images are great. However the dense block of information and slightly odd formatting make it hard to follow. Perhaps using diagrams to explain the differing gene expression and breaking down the information into bullet points would make it more readable.

The historic findings and abnormalities section is particularly well done. The images complement the minimal yet important points made. I was left wanting to read more into it so that suggests there’s room for further development and a deeper explanation of skin abnormalities.


  • Great overview given in the introduction. Maybe look to replacing the words "this page" to something else to avoid repetition
  • I'm really liking how everything has been simplified into dot points and tables where relevant. Don't forget to include relevant references all throughout though, to justify all that you've included in each section
  • I can't express how much I love your first table. Great work!
  • Proofread so that you don't repeat the same things in your table though. You mention "in a study" numerous times but there's no indication to which studies they are
  • I'm sure Mark would be thinking this same thing, but look to getting different references outside of this Embryology website, maybe from textbooks or otherwise for preliminary information on development
  • The "recent findings" section looks nicely formatted but just a bit wordy. Maybe think of dividing the text up with bullet points or images
  • Really liking your "historic findings" section! Great research
  • Maybe think of re-creating some of the simpler pictures by drawing them yourselves. That way you're not using too many pictures from this Embryology website, Mark warned our group about this point
  • Great choices for the "abnormalities" section. Traumatising at first, but very well-researched and presented

Week 5

Hey guys!! I found some research material that we can use to construct our time line!

Historic information is hard to find! I might go look at some text books in the library --Z3418340 (talk) 12:50, 27 August 2014 (EST) How is everyone else going?

--Z3417843 (talk) 12:52, 27 August 2014 (EST) Hey!! That's great! I also found some material for abnormalities. There seem to be a lot about septal defects. I'm gonna try to look up for more defects.

--Z3417843 (talk) 22:53, 30 August 2014 (EST)Woo!! Nice to see more links in the page! Rehmina and I also thought that it would be easier for marking if one of the two people in current research do timeline instead because that would make marking easier and less confusing. But that's not final, it's only a suggestion. Also, Dr. Hill gave us some tips on what to focus/include in our research such as:

  • Remodelling during the fetal period
  • Changes during ossification - haematopoietic elocution from liver to bone marrow
  • Early development of WBCs — hot topic right now!!


Hey everyone, yeah that sounds good with me..  :) so rather each person focuses on 1 of the 4 topics right? --Z3417796 (talk) 12:35, 31 August 2014 (EST)

--Z3417843 (talk) 18:36, 1 September 2014 (EST)Yep, exactly! I'm really glad that's alright with you but we can still talk about more in the lab.

--Z3417843 (talk) 12:14, 2 September 2014 (EST)Hey everyone! I just asked Dr. Hill about using review articles. He said it's alright to use review articles as long as you say that the information came from a review article when citing. We can also use images from review articles and there is no need to say that it came from a review article.

Week 6

--Z3418488 (talk) 20:19, 3 September 2014 (EST)Hey guys, I had a good talk with Mark today after the lab. Since we're doing the Cardiovascular system, it incorporates the (i) development of the heart, (ii) development of the blood vessels and (iii) the formation of red blood cells/white blood cells. But Mark said that as a group, we would be able to create and produce this web-site in a manner that we thought was appropriate. We could focus on one of the specific areas or more broadly on each area, if we chose to. But, MOST IMPORTANTLY, our project should be cohesive. What we talk about should be introduced well at the start and should be cohesive through out all of the subsections that we're working on. He really stressed the importance of us having a single, unified vision of our end product and that it should be succinct throughout it all. Im proposing that we actually decide what to focus on very soon.

--Z3418488 (talk) 20:19, 3 September 2014 (EST) I'd particularly like to just focus on the development of the heart? Maybe incorporate the formation of blood cells if the research in the other areas is interesting and notable?


--Z3418488 (talk) 20:24, 3 September 2014 (EST)In regards to the use of the textbook, we are allowed to use the information from it if we cite it properly, but he really want us to be using articles (and even Review articles) to discuss our information.

I agree, the heart should remain our focus, but of course other aspects such as blood vessel formation/ blood cells would naturally fall into it as well- maybe just a brief mention wherever appropriate? --Z3417796 (talk) 21:22, 3 September 2014 (EST)

Week 7

--Z3417843 (talk) 21:05, 8 September 2014 (EST) Hmm. I agree. Let's try and focus on the heart for now and see how we go? And if time permits, maybe we will be able to include the development of blood vessels and blood cells. Sorry I didn't reply so soon, kinda busy week for me haha!

--Z3418488 (talk) 00:24, 10 September 2014 (EST)Ok that sounds really good and reasonable! I'd be happy to follow that plan. And yeah, same! Very busy week for me as well! But yeah, I think lets just focus and refine our research to just the development of the heart at the moment

--Z3418488 (talk) 00:40, 10 September 2014 (EST)Hey guys, Im having difficulty knowing whether the use of an article is fine or not?! If it says "Full-free-text" does that mean we're allowed to incoporate it? Because a lot of the copyright information, is very brief. Thanks heaps, if you guys know an answer haha

--Z3418488 (talk) 00:55, 10 September 2014 (EST)Ok, never mind.. I find out the answer haha. If it says "Open-Access" or "Full-free-text" it is only free to read online and may/may not be allowed for re-use. You'; have to read carefully or apply for permission lol. I guess i'll just be sticking to mainly the Public Library of Science (PLoS), Biomed central (BMC) and Springer Open... which we are pretty much able to use, with the right referencing and acknowledgement. I read this on the 'Copy rights' page on this wiki. http://php.med.unsw.edu.au/embryology/index.php?title=Help:Copyright_Tutorial. Can someone verify or correct me if i'm wrong haha?

--Z3417843 (talk) 11:56, 10 September 2014 (EST) I thought copyright only applied on images and not on content. It would be really difficult to write a report when the most papers have copyright. We can ask Dr. Hill in the lab just to confirm.

Week 8

--Z3417796 (talk) 12:56, 17 September 2014 (EST) Hey guys, so Carl and I had a talk with Dr. Hill and he has agreed to allow us to change topics from Cardio to Integumentary. To finalise the change all members have to personally email him saying we all agree to the topic change. Carl and I have started thinking about our approach to the topic and we think we should have a main focus on skin and smaller sub-topics on hair, nails, glands and teeth. Each members role just remains the same and any problems we will all still help eachother :)

Week 9

--Z3417796 (talk) 12:46, 22 September 2014 (EST)Hey guys, I've added some headings for our new page just to get a start, we've got alot to catch up on, I guess we still have to talk about it as a group for the overall layout, we should all start adding some content soon.

--Z3417843 (talk) 12:41, 23 September 2014 (EST) Thank you for fixing it! Yeah, we have a lot to do but that's okay. Midsem break is next week and hopefully we can get most of the bulk done before week 10.

Midsem Break

--Z3417843 (talk) 23:24, 29 September 2014 (EST) Just wanted to let you guys know that Dr. Hill gave us some tips on what to look at a few weeks back. He mentioned "vernix caseosa and fetal hair." Here's a wikipedia link to vernix caseosa (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Vernix_caseosa) just to give you guys an idea on what it is. I'm aiming to finish before the end of the week so that I could help anyone with their parts. Anyway, I hope everyone's having a good break!