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Under the title "Ocular Manifestations" perhaps indicate what the two sections are, just so the following on sections make sense and don't appear disjointed. The sections on the genetic caused abnormalities is fascinating and very well written. The timeline included in the information about Leber Congenital Amaurosis is particularly interesting. The spacing in the section on genes associated with Anophthalmia and Microphthalmia appears slightly strange. The figures included are particularly illustrative and appropriate. Similarly the section on environmentally caused abnormalities is really well written and interesting.  
Under the title "Ocular Manifestations" perhaps indicate what the two sections are, just so the following on sections make sense and don't appear disjointed. The sections on the genetic caused abnormalities is fascinating and very well written. The timeline included in the information about Leber Congenital Amaurosis is particularly interesting. The spacing in the section on genes associated with Anophthalmia and Microphthalmia appears slightly strange. The figures included are particularly illustrative and appropriate. Similarly the section on environmentally caused abnormalities is really well written and interesting.  


Perhaps a more extensive section on current research could be included. If possible, link the words in the glossary to where they appeared in the text. This is the coding if you don't have it [[#Glossary|'''Words as they will appear in text''']]. Just add that in place of the word when you first mention it in the text. The citing and referencing is really well done. It also shows a great depth of research. The figures/photographs so far included are brilliant but the inclusion of a student drawn diagram somewhere if possible would be effective. Also try and fix the general layout of the project, possibly including some more subheadings. In general the content relates to the the course and is pitched at an appropriate level. Hope this helps.
Perhaps a more extensive section on current research could be included. If possible, link the words in the glossary to where they appeared in the text. This is the coding if you don't have it [[#Glossary|'''Words for Glossary''']]. Just add that in place of the word when you first mention it in the text. The citing and referencing is really well done. It also shows a great depth of research. The figures/photographs so far included are brilliant but the inclusion of a student drawn diagram somewhere if possible would be effective. Also try and fix the general layout of the project, possibly including some more subheadings. In general the content relates to the the course and is pitched at an appropriate level. Hope this helps.
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Revision as of 14:21, 24 September 2012

From the Course Coordinator

2012 Projects: Vision | Somatosensory | Taste | Olfaction | Abnormal Vision | Hearing


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2. History

  • Embryology History Explore the rich history of sensory research. In particular look through the available images that may complement the text. Any of this material can be used, you should cite the original paper or textbook. Gray | 1921 Bailey and Miller

Group evaluation

--Z3333038 08:41, 24 September 2012 (EST) "The introduction is good in the manner that it provides some brief background information regarding the normal development of the eye and abnormalities. Additionally, I liked how the introduction described the aims of the page because it sets up a structure for the reader to follow. Just make sure to proof read this section: “The development of the eye is very sensitive and REQUIRES accurate...”


In regards to the information presented and layout (outcomes 1, 2, 4 and 9):


1. Normal Eye Development: This section appears very well researched. I like how you referred to the stages throughout development. However, this section could be enhanced by adding an image of the normal eye structure and development – this acts as a reference point for your page viewers, allowing for a clear visual comparison between the abnormalities and normal structure.


2. Abnormal Development: I like the overview provided at the beginning as it sets the scene for what points you will be covering in this section. Great job. All sections are quite good, just perhaps include more images to further enhance your page.

a. Abnormal lens development: I liked how you first described the function of the gene in development and then stated any abnormalities that arise when the gene is not expressed or mutated. I liked how you included an image for the crystalline genes; just make sure to refer to the image in text (e.g. see fig. 1. or see accompanying image).

b. Abnormal corneal development: Similar to the abnormal lens section, there is a good explanation provided for each gene involved. Just some improvements: make sure to reference all information; e.g. No reference provided for “The ion transporter SLC4A11 promote sodium-dependent transport of borate as well as flux of sodium and hydroxyl ions. It has been shown that SLC4A11 is expressed in the endothelial cells of the cornea, and mutation of....”. The accompanying image has been referenced correctly and described, good work!

c. Abnormal retinal development: Once again, a great scope of research and information and suitable image. I liked how you described the impact of each mutation explicitly such as in Albinism “ganglion cells of retina decreased by 25%”. This really helps the reader to understand the extent of the abnormalities from certain gene mutations.


3. Ocular manifestations: the opening sentence is slightly vague. Could you please state which two separate sections that you are referring to? The section that follows could be better organised. It seems to jump from genetic issues to a research timeline then to future research on that disease to another example of a genetic mutation which produces abnormalities. I would suggest putting the research timeline shortly after the introduction and integrating research history not just on LCA but other abnormalities as well. However, the content for all these sections is well referenced and interesting to read. The balance between text and images between LCA and anopthalmia/micropthalmia sections is good and are both really interesting to read! I liked how you provided some epidemiological data and clinical manifestations in depth accompanied by suitable images. However, the environmental abnormalities section could use with more dot-point styles and images to enhance the presentation and aid in your descriptions.


In regards to peer teaching (outcome 5), this page was an absolute joy to read and all technical language was explained in the glossary. Just make sure to pay attention to those minor improvements. Good job!"


Introduction gives an overview of your project. This gives structure to your project. The introduction is a little too brief. It would be nice to add some detail about the significance of eye abnormalities:

  • how important is vision to humans
  • how does vision abnormalities affect people
  • how many people are suffering from major eye abnormalities, etc.

Great images. They highlight the severity of abnormalities associated with vision. It would be nice if you can make the images a little bigger or add more images. it just seem there's too much text and not enough images to break it up.

The normal development section is succinct and give sufficient background information so readers can understand the abnormalities section. It would be good if you can put this normal function part into point form or table. for example, 'stage...development'

The gene mutations section is very complicated. Maybe talk about the FOX genes and Pax6 genes in abnormal lens development and not as a separate section. This is so readers can associate the mutation with the disease immediately, without having to scroll to the bottom to find the consequences of such mutation. The layout makes the disease and gene section hard to understand. Maybe set it out as:

  • Genetic mutation
  • diseases from this mutation
  • clinical symptoms of diseases
  • treatments for the diseases

Most of the images are well referenced, except Albino Fundus image. for this image, you need the PMID reference style.

References 45-48 should be placed as one reference.

--Z3332863 17:26, 23 September 2012 (EST)


Your introduction is quite short, but it does state what you will be discussing on your page. You might want to include the normal development in the introduction, to allow for an overview of what normally happens before you actually start on the abnormal development. It just seems a little odd that you have abnormal vision as you title and then almost immediately after that you have a normal eye development heading.

I really like the chronological order used in the normal development section. It might be a bit easier to read if you use dot points. References seems to be fine, however, 4 and 5 are the same. It might also be useful to create a link to the group page on normal vision development.

Abnormal development consists of a few subheadings. Personally, I would delete the lines below the different subheadings. It will make it look more like one section on abnormal development. I think it was a good idea to look at the different parts of the eye related to abnormalities – lens, cornea, retina, etc. You look at different genes which play an important role at a certain developmental stage and you explain the resulting effects. I can see a lot of research has been done on this section. Images will need to be made bigger. They look insignificant with this size and it just seems like the text is going on and on. A lot of terms mentioned in this section are not included in the glossary, eg. Dysgenesis, substantia propria, CRX (what does it stand for?). Please add these in. Again, check your references, because some are the same, eg. 8 & 9.

Ocular manifestation is part of the abnormal development section (I think), so please make sure you show this with the headings. Again, immediately below this seems to be another heading with genetics, which has nothing included… or does LCA belong to genetics? I am a bit confused due to all your different headings and lines which seem to separate parts that may potentially belong together.

In your LCA section I would change the order of text a little: definition (as you have at the start), then epidemiology (which you have at the bottom), then the section on Dr Leber (up to “…placing great emphasis upon the high incidence of hereditary factors.”), lastly a new paragraph on the diagnosis (“As stated in the section on… diagnostic protocol for LCA”). The link to Abnormal Retinal Development does not work and will need editing. I can see that your timeline refers to LCA in particular and it is quite expansive. The one reference provided leads to a website with a timeline that seems to have been copied and pasted into your project. Please change this into your own words and (where possible) provide references to the original papers. The table also seems to be located in a strange position and it may be better to include this information in a table on history (in general), which you do not have at the moment. New research development also focuses on LCA only. Maybe create a separate section at the end where you can mention this and include more current research in brief paragraphs. The image relates well and has the appropriate citation, copyright and student template. The description could include a little more information.

Anophthalmia and microphthalmia are other genetic abnormalities described. Again, with the image you can expand slightly upon the description, but besides that it relates well to your text. Information provided is good, and includes the clinical description, genetic causes and management. Most important is that you use the same layout for your headings throughout your project. Within this one section you are using different subheadings and it all looks a bit chaotic and makes it less encouraging to read. You explain the role various genes play and I would like to know at what week/gestational stage they are important and can cause these abnormalities. Make sure all your references are correct, eg. There is no reference for 30.

It is probably good you only focused on 2 abnormalities caused by environmental factors. Images could really complement the text (although your whole page could probably use a few more images), so please add these. You include some relevant information and statistics, but make sure you also keep adding to the glossary. References are also the same for 45-48, hence these need editing.

In my opinion, firstly change the layout of your page and make it more organised with logical headings. Then focus on some of the other things mentioned above.

Hope this helps!


Your introduction is relatively well written and the brief explanation of new terms such as microphthalmia was particularly useful. Perhaps it would be possible to break the text into two paragraphs to make reading easier.

It is really good to see a section included about normal eye development as it provides a basis of understanding for the remainder of the page. Concise and to the point and not too complex, it's great. Only suggestion would be to place it in a table perhaps with each Carnegie stage a new entry.

Layout of abnormalities is very logical covering the main areas of developmental abnormalities. However it is slightly confusing that immediately under the title Abnormal Lens Development more information on normal development is given. Allocating the defects to their associated individual genes is good but perhaps instead of a dotpoint a subheading would be of more use. The actual information is clearly and effectively written. The inclusion of the pictures clearly illustrates the abnormalities but their placement is a little odd. Perhaps they are too large. The captions on the pictures are appropriate and the pictures are appropriately referenced and it is great that the link to the picture contains more information.

Under the title "Ocular Manifestations" perhaps indicate what the two sections are, just so the following on sections make sense and don't appear disjointed. The sections on the genetic caused abnormalities is fascinating and very well written. The timeline included in the information about Leber Congenital Amaurosis is particularly interesting. The spacing in the section on genes associated with Anophthalmia and Microphthalmia appears slightly strange. The figures included are particularly illustrative and appropriate. Similarly the section on environmentally caused abnormalities is really well written and interesting.

Perhaps a more extensive section on current research could be included. If possible, link the words in the glossary to where they appeared in the text. This is the coding if you don't have it Words for Glossary. Just add that in place of the word when you first mention it in the text. The citing and referencing is really well done. It also shows a great depth of research. The figures/photographs so far included are brilliant but the inclusion of a student drawn diagram somewhere if possible would be effective. Also try and fix the general layout of the project, possibly including some more subheadings. In general the content relates to the the course and is pitched at an appropriate level. Hope this helps.


Discussion

Hey so what organ did everyone decide on heart or liver. I vote for the Liver


Hi Team! I would first like to apologize for not coming on Wednesday on our practical. So I am sorry one more time for that. I am coming to practicals this Wednesday so we can discuss our topics. Just to ask what happen on Wednesday in regards of our group project? So we need to decide between heart or liver to write our project? If that is so...I vote for the heart then:)

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Hey kidlings, just to let you know, I'm going to be looking through my path/grey's anatomy textbooks for anything i can possibly find. I think we should start with a little intro of what is the normal development and then have some abnormalities that can stem from that? Thoughts? --Z3374173 19:17, 21 August 2012 (EST)

Hey Team, some ideas for the focus of our topic. 1. a basic overview of the development of the eye, 2. divide the eye up into it regions of development and look at the abnormalities that can occur, including the factors which make it abnormal: congenital or defect; percentage of occurance in society and/or likely hood aquiring it; processes of the abnormal development (how abnormaility occurs); living with the abnormality; any treatments and/or prevntions for the abnormality. --Z3220343 19:31, 21 August 2012 (EST)

Possible sources: [1] [2] --Z3374173 10:12, 22 August 2012 (EST)

Textbook: The Developing Human Chapter 20 [3] --Z3220343 10:14, 22 August 2012 (EST)

Looking through textbooks, I have found Retinoblastoma which is a tumor usually in the posterior retina. It says it can occur in 2 year olds but also can occur at birth, so that could be a developmental one. I found that in my pathology textbook, Others i found could be Horner's syndrome, that apparently can start developing in fetal development. I'll go through my mums old midwifery textbooks too. Anyone else find anything?--Z3374173 16:49, 26 August 2012 (EST)

Hey so i was looking through the textbook and i found a list of defects of the retina. further down it also talks about congenital glaucoma. [4] i found this while surfing pubmed may be of some use?[5] i had heard of a genetic disorder in which if both parents are carriers the baby has 25% chance being born blind. i think this was the disorder if not, it still could be interesting for our assignment [6][7][8]--Z3220343 21:09, 28 August 2012 (EST)

I think I shall do Horner's Syndrome. [9]--Z3374173 11:29, 29 August 2012 (EST)

Hi team :D I just found an article that talks about all the current knowledge on conditions related to abnormal visual development in infants. In the article, they have aslo included prevalence, risk factors and mechanisms that are involved with the development of these conditions. I think it would be quite useful to our own topic. Just letting everyone know, i will be doing congenital cataracts. [10]--Z3331330 12:36, 29 August 2012 (EST)

Heres another article description of the normal visual development, each component of the visual system is included and explained very clearly, this would be useful for our general overview on the development of the eye. In particular, the retina development is also mentioned in the article which we can make use of when comparing our disorder with the normal development. [11]--Z3331330 12:47, 29 August 2012 (EST)

Hey Guys, After trawlling through stacks of info on Horner's syndrome I'm not satisfied with the amount of info there is so I'm going to change it up and try Chorioretinal Scars. I can find more information and really hope this comes together!! --Z3374173 21:34, 10 September 2012 (EST)

I did the normal development, feel free to check it over, make changes etc, I have the PDF files of the articles i used if you need to check. Also, I've forgotten how to make all the reference bind together if they are the same text, i cant seem to find the help to help me so I'm just going to leave it until someone can help me! --Z3374173 17:07, 12 September 2012 (EST)

hey team, do u guys think that we have enough information? what else should we add in if we do need some more.--Z3331330 22:00, 17 September 2012 (EST)