Talk:2017 Group Project 4 - Revision history

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	* Future questions identified at least 2 major eye issues (eye transplants, bionic eye)		* Future questions identified at least 2 major eye issues (eye transplants, bionic eye)
	** Nothing about stem cells in this future research section?		** Nothing about stem cells in this future research section?
	* Glossary - clearly organised table structure. Easy to read with good brief descriptions.
	** Not all project terminology has been included.
	* Referencing - reasonable coverage of literature and sources, multiple citations appear correctly in the list, some errors in list.		* Referencing - reasonable coverage of literature and sources, multiple citations appear correctly in the list, some errors in list.
	** Overuse of Larsen and Gilbert as primary sources for information.		** Overuse of Larsen and Gilbert as primary sources for information.

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	* Future questions identified at least 2 major eye issues (eye transplants, bionic eye)		* Future questions identified at least 2 major eye issues (eye transplants, bionic eye)
	** Nothing about stem cells in this future research section?		** Nothing about stem cells in this future research section?
			* Glossary - clearly organised table structure. Easy to read with good brief descriptions.
			** Not all project terminology has been included.
	* Referencing - reasonable coverage of literature and sources, multiple citations appear correctly in the list, some errors in list.		* Referencing - reasonable coverage of literature and sources, multiple citations appear correctly in the list, some errors in list.
	** Overuse of Larsen and Gilbert as primary sources for information.		** Overuse of Larsen and Gilbert as primary sources for information.

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	* 10 assessment criteria demonstrated with some exceptions.		* 10 assessment criteria demonstrated with some exceptions.
	* Reasonable balance of text and media.		* Reasonable balance of text and media.
			* Anatomy of the Adult Eye is comprehensive (text) supported by images (student drawn)
			** this section seemed overlong within the context of the project and could have been explained with a few well labelled cartoon figures.
	* Development of the eye components does not cover vitreous chamber component.		* Development of the eye components does not cover vitreous chamber component.
	* No discussion of hyaloid blood vessels as transient structures.		* No discussion of hyaloid blood vessels as transient structures.

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	* Development of the eye components does not cover vitreous chamber component.		* Development of the eye components does not cover vitreous chamber component.
	* No discussion of hyaloid blood vessels as transient structures.		* No discussion of hyaloid blood vessels as transient structures.
			* Extraocular muscles descriptions only, not developmental information.
	* Timeline of embryonic development useful inclusion		* Timeline of embryonic development useful inclusion
	** very general, FA or GA weeks?		** very general, FA or GA weeks?
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	** could have explained that it covered only early development features.		** could have explained that it covered only early development features.
	** could have been larger on the page as the legends could not be easily read without opening as separate file.		** could have been larger on the page as the legends could not be easily read without opening as separate file.
			* Signalling pathways identified dsome important pathways
			** Signalling pathway images would have helped the educational value of this section.
			** Links to OMIM or other online databases would have been useful.
	* Extensive glossary.		* Extensive glossary.
			** Factor acronyms needed explaining in glossary.
			* Future questions identified at least 2 major eye issues (eye transplants, bionic eye)
			** Nothing about stem cells in this future research section?
	* Referencing - reasonable coverage of literature and sources, multiple citations appear correctly in the list, some errors in list.		* Referencing - reasonable coverage of literature and sources, multiple citations appear correctly in the list, some errors in list.
	** Overuse of Larsen and Gilbert as primary sources for information.		** Overuse of Larsen and Gilbert as primary sources for information.

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	File:Stage22_eyelids.jpg\|Fig 10 Human embryo eyelid development z5075778 - UNSW image		File:Stage22_eyelids.jpg\|Fig 10 Human embryo eyelid development z5075778 - UNSW image
	File:BionicEye.jpg\|250px\|Fig 15. Bionic Eye Diagram Z5117343 source only, no additional information supplied.		File:BionicEye.jpg\|250px\|Fig 15. Bionic Eye Diagram Z5117343 source only, no additional information supplied.
	File:Anophthalmia.jpeg\|Anophthalmia Z5117343 - CDC		File:Anophthalmia.jpeg\|Anophthalmia Z5117343 - CDC image, reuse allowed. No description or student template.
	File:Microphthalmia-500px.jpg\|Microphthalmia Z5117343 - CDC		File:Microphthalmia-500px.jpg\|Microphthalmia Z5117343 - CDC, reuse allowed. No description or student template.
	File:Opac figure 7.jpg\|Iris Coloboma Z5117343 - deleted for copyright		File:Opac figure 7.jpg\|Iris Coloboma Z5117343 - deleted for copyright
	/File:Opac_figure_10.jpg\|Partial Aniridia Z5117343 - deleted for copyright		/File:Opac_figure_10.jpg\|Partial Aniridia Z5117343 - deleted for copyright

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	* Timeline of embryonic development useful inclusion		* Timeline of embryonic development useful inclusion
	** very general, FA or GA weeks?		** very general, FA or GA weeks?
			* Carnegie Stages table was good inclusion and clearly organised.
			** why were so few examples if eyes at different embryonic stages included in the associated images.
			* YouTube video Development of the eye components was a good inclusion and good animation.
			** could have explained that it covered only early development features.
			** could have been larger on the page as the legends could not be easily read without opening as separate file.
	* Extensive glossary.		* Extensive glossary.
	* Referencing - reasonable coverage of literature and sources, multiple citations appear correctly in the list, some errors in list.		* Referencing - reasonable coverage of literature and sources, multiple citations appear correctly in the list, some errors in list.

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	* Development of the eye components does not cover vitreous chamber component.		* Development of the eye components does not cover vitreous chamber component.
	* No discussion of hyaloid blood vessels as transient structures.		* No discussion of hyaloid blood vessels as transient structures.
			* Timeline of embryonic development useful inclusion
			** very general, FA or GA weeks?
	* Extensive glossary.		* Extensive glossary.
	* Referencing - reasonable coverage of literature and sources, multiple citations appear correctly in the list, some errors in list.		* Referencing - reasonable coverage of literature and sources, multiple citations appear correctly in the list, some errors in list.
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	** Ref 7 - textbook , not appropriate reference for hyaloid blood vessels.		** Ref 7 - textbook , not appropriate reference for hyaloid blood vessels.
	** Ref 39 - online web page should be cited in perhaps APA style rather than just a web link.		** Ref 39 - online web page should be cited in perhaps APA style rather than just a web link.


	===Edits===		===Edits===

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Images

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	File:Microphthalmia-500px.jpg\|Microphthalmia Z5117343 - CDC		File:Microphthalmia-500px.jpg\|Microphthalmia Z5117343 - CDC
	File:Opac figure 7.jpg\|Iris Coloboma Z5117343 - deleted for copyright		File:Opac figure 7.jpg\|Iris Coloboma Z5117343 - deleted for copyright
			/File:Opac_figure_10.jpg\|Partial Aniridia Z5117343 - deleted for copyright
	</gallery>		</gallery>

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	* z5177670 has added figure 4 and 6 and the figures in the Carnegie Stages section. These are taken from Mark HIll's wiki pages.		* z5177670 has added figure 4 and 6 and the figures in the Carnegie Stages section. These are taken from Mark HIll's wiki pages.
	* z5075778 has added images of the lens, cornea, eyelids and extraocular muscles (under their corresponding headings) also taken from MH's wiki pages.		* z5075778 has added images of the lens, cornea, eyelids and extraocular muscles (under their corresponding headings) also taken from MH's wiki pages.
	* Z5117343 has used ~~an image~~ (File:Opac figure 7.jpg) for Iris Coloboma that is "© 2015 American Academy of Ophthalmology" no additional reference or copyright information included.		* Z5117343 has used images (File:Opac figure 7.jpg, File:Opac figure 10.jpg) for Iris Coloboma and and iridia that are "© 2015 American Academy of Ophthalmology" no additional reference or copyright information included. These have been deleted for copyright.

	====Images General Notes====		====Images General Notes====

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2017-11-18T23:54:34Z

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	* Development of the eye components does not cover vitreous chamber component.		* Development of the eye components does not cover vitreous chamber component.
	* No discussion of hyaloid blood vessels as transient structures.		* No discussion of hyaloid blood vessels as transient structures.
			* Extensive glossary.
	* Referencing - reasonable coverage of literature and sources, multiple citations appear correctly in the list, some errors in list.		* Referencing - reasonable coverage of literature and sources, multiple citations appear correctly in the list, some errors in list.
	** Overuse of Larsen and Gilbert as primary sources for information.		** Overuse of Larsen and Gilbert as primary sources for information.
	** Ref 7 - textbook , not appropriate reference for hyaloid blood vessels.		** Ref 7 - textbook , not appropriate reference for hyaloid blood vessels.
	** Ref 7 - online web page should be cited in perhaps APA style rather than just a web link.		** Ref 39 - online web page should be cited in perhaps APA style rather than just a web link.


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	File:Stage22_eyelids.jpg\|Fig 10 Human embryo eyelid development z5075778 - UNSW image		File:Stage22_eyelids.jpg\|Fig 10 Human embryo eyelid development z5075778 - UNSW image
	File:BionicEye.jpg\|250px\|Fig 15. Bionic Eye Diagram Z5117343 source only, no additional information supplied.		File:BionicEye.jpg\|250px\|Fig 15. Bionic Eye Diagram Z5117343 source only, no additional information supplied.
			File:Anophthalmia.jpeg\|Anophthalmia Z5117343 - CDC
			File:Microphthalmia-500px.jpg\|Microphthalmia Z5117343 - CDC
			File:Opac figure 7.jpg\|Iris Coloboma Z5117343 - deleted for copyright
	</gallery>		</gallery>

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	* z5177670 has added figure 4 and 6 and the figures in the Carnegie Stages section. These are taken from Mark HIll's wiki pages.		* z5177670 has added figure 4 and 6 and the figures in the Carnegie Stages section. These are taken from Mark HIll's wiki pages.
	* z5075778 has added images of the lens, cornea, eyelids and extraocular muscles (under their corresponding headings) also taken from MH's wiki pages.		* z5075778 has added images of the lens, cornea, eyelids and extraocular muscles (under their corresponding headings) also taken from MH's wiki pages.
			* Z5117343 has used an image (File:Opac figure 7.jpg) for Iris Coloboma that is "© 2015 American Academy of Ophthalmology" no additional reference or copyright information included.

	====Images General Notes====		====Images General Notes====

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	File:Stage22_eyelids.jpg\|Fig 10 Human embryo eyelid development z5075778 - UNSW image		File:Stage22_eyelids.jpg\|Fig 10 Human embryo eyelid development z5075778 - UNSW image
	File:BionicEye.jpg\|250px\|Fig 15. Bionic Eye Diagram Z5117343 source only, no additional information supplied.		File:BionicEye.jpg\|250px\|Fig 15. Bionic Eye Diagram Z5117343 source only, no additional information supplied.
	File:Anophthalmia.jpeg\|Anophthalmia Z5117343 - CDC		File:Anophthalmia.jpeg\|Anophthalmia Z5117343 - CDC image, reuse allowed. No description or student template.
	File:Microphthalmia-500px.jpg\|Microphthalmia Z5117343 - CDC		File:Microphthalmia-500px.jpg\|Microphthalmia Z5117343 - CDC, reuse allowed. No description or student template.
	File:Opac figure 7.jpg\|Iris Coloboma Z5117343 - deleted for copyright		File:Opac figure 7.jpg\|Iris Coloboma Z5117343 - deleted for copyright
	/File:Opac_figure_10.jpg\|Partial Aniridia Z5117343 - deleted for copyright		/File:Opac_figure_10.jpg\|Partial Aniridia Z5117343 - deleted for copyright