User talk:Z5178570

From Embryology

The Kidney: Overall this seems like a very well put together project and is very informative and easy to follow, and enjoyable to read. There is an appropriate balance of both text and visual diagrams, which greatly helped my understanding of the development of the kidneys. Figure 4 appears to be missing a reference. I do think perhaps an animation to explain nephron development may add additional clarity, and would provide another level of interaction for the reader. Perhaps also think about adding a student drawn diagram. The table is a great way to display the developmental stages in an easy to read manner. The ‘blood supply’ section appears to be copy and paste which I assume will be rewritten? The section on current research is simply a list of PubMed links, and should be expanded to display content that is informative to the reader. Likewise, ‘questions for the future’ and ‘general info on the renal system’ remain as headings without any accompanying information. I think the questions for the future could be an interesting section, however general info I would think will have been covered elsewhere in the project. The topic has clearly been researched well, and is well referenced, with most references being from scientific papers. All in all I think this is a high quality project, that will only require a few additional tweaks to take it to the next level.

The Heart: Use of headings and subheadings break this complex developmental process in to understandable, clear sections. The images chosen to reinforce the material are appropriate and I particularly like that time has been taken to draw a number of these. There does seem to be an awful lot of information, and I wonder if this can be cut down at all. For example there is the section on signaling during development, which is a more complex section to understand. This is greatly helped by the diagrams but I can see that there are additional headings that are yet to have information added. It might be an idea to pick a few signaling pathways that occur and really perfect those. I think it has the potential to become very confusing to the reader otherwise. It is very useful to the reader that you have included a glossary of terms, however I wonder if it may be more effective if this table is placed at the beginning of the page, or as a link at the top that can be opened up, so as the reader can familirise themselves with the terms prior to reading the page. The page appears to be referenced extensively throughout and appropriately. Good job

The Eye: Overall the project page looks good. I like that you have used a mix of student drawn diagrams and also paper derived ones. However, I do think that the ‘anterior eye’ drawing could be a little clearer, as it is a hard to tell what label corresponds to what. Also, the referencing for these I presume the original diagrams are from an anatomy book or something, this should be cited as a ‘based on…’ Stage 21 and 22 are missing and should be filled in with the accompanying information. Having a number of tables really helps convey some of the information in a succinct manner, I particularly like this approach in the congenital abnormalities section. In the ‘development of the eye components’ section some visual aids would be helpful otherwise there is just going to be a lot of text, and in order to keep the reader engaged, pictures or even animations would really help. Could have a wider list of references, but I imagine as information is added so will these be. Well done!

The Lungs: The project page is looking good. I particularly found the developmental timeline to be very informative and easy to follow. I like the fact that you have used a table here to display it along with diagrams that fit each stage, with each diagram being cited and referenced correctly. I think the diagram that is related to the histology section could be a little clearer to read as it is a little jumbled and slightly hard to distinguish everything. The section on developmental signaling processes is good, and gives the detail without making the section too long and complicated. ‘current understandings and areas of research’ has no information as of yet, it would be good to add some recent research papers with a short summary. The use of movies is helpful, but maybe consider moving them further up the page, to a more relevant section, the beginning of ‘developmental origin’ would be better. A glossary of terms would be helpful, as some of the jargon is complicated. There seems to be a citing error in the reference list that should be dealt with. Overall it is a very interesting topic and I think you have executed it well so far.

The Cerebellum: The appearance of the project page is really good and the content is well written and very extensive on the Cerebellum. The balance of text to pictures is generally good, however I do think the section on the on ‘cerebellum development’ is maybe a little too wordy and could be broken up with more pictures/ animations, or could be cut down. The pictures that have been chosen are of high quality from appropriate sources and well referenced. I found the ‘cerebellum developmental weeks’ particularly clever as a way of putting this information across, greatly helped by the accompanying pictures as a visual aid. I do not think that the title at the top needs to be in blue, as it doesn’t seem to fit with the general theme. I think a ‘future research’ section would be particularly helpful to address any exciting new developments or the focus of recent studies. I do however think you have done a really good job so far, well done