Peer Review (Lab 10)
Mark Hill (talk) 10:57, 11 October 2018 (AEDT) This brief peer assessment provides both positive and negative feedback information to the groups as required by the exercise. The feedback is also useful in that you have identified specific issues within each project that require attention. The language you have used in the feedback is quite conversational, and while appropriate for "peer" feedback, you might consider a more professional text style for future feedback processes. Thank you for completing the peer feedback assessment.
I feel that the introduction sounded a bit off as referring to neural crest as a term seems rather inaccurate. A good history of the neural crest cells was provided and it is quite detailed (in fact it may be too detailed as it seems really long).
I really like the hand drawing of the neural crest but I feel that it would look much better if you shifted the image to the right rather than let it take up the whole space.
The content was pretty easy to follow and digest, so good job on that! You might want to take note on some errors in punctuation throughout the wiki page but since its just a draft, it isn't that big of an issue for now.
The animal models section was really detailed and quite well written but the references need to be edited properly in the right format. I'm also a little confused as to why the picture of the "cascade of cathecholamine synthesis" is found right beside the Animal model section, you may want to adjust this!
There are a few references present at the end of the page, but I assume this is because the other references have not been formatted properly yet.
Overall good job with the page so far! I can see that the flow is some what smooth already (except for the empty sections) but just take note that there are still a few tweaks to be done with the referencing and placement of images!
Z5229185 (talk) 17:57, 4 October 2018 (AEST) Introduction seems to be too detailed and the linkage to neural crest cells was not mentioned in the introduction. I believe that the focus of the introduction should be shifted more towards the role of neural crest cells in melanocyte formation and not purely on the melanoycytes.
The first sentence of the history sections may need a bit of rephrasing "The history of the discovery of the melanocyte spans about 4000 years, from when a pigmentation disorder of skin was first documented in 2200 BC, to when the melanocyte was confirmed as a pigment synthesising cell in 1917" as it sounds as if the discovery of melanocyte stopped at 1917?
Under the "Skin" section, the 2nd paragraph started off with "we". You may want to tweak this.
Loads of images were uploaded on this wiki page which makes the reading and understanding much easier, good job on this! For the formating, you may consider shifting some images to the sides to make it look better as I think there are way too many images that were placed in the middle of the page for now.
Lots of references were included for what was written so far showing that a lot of research have been done on this topic by this group, good job!
The flow of the introduction seems rather abrupt between the two sentences, but I assume that the introduction is not completed yet.
In embryonic origins, Dorsal root ganglion was mentioned as DRG in the 2nd paragraph. You might want to introduce this abbreviation beside the term at the first paragraph: Dorsal Root Ganglion (DRG) so that the reader can easily understand what you are referring to.
Some typos can be seen through out the wiki page like migratio and the format of the referencing is not consistent "lateral to the neural tube. ." and "lowed quickly by the precursors that shape the development of TrkA.." as compared to other parts of the wiki: "during later stages following migration. "
Content wise, the project seems to be doing fine with tons of references and content (with exception of the empty sections like History).
The videos were not uploaded on the page properly (under the current research section), so you might want to fix that.
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Neuropore cell shape changes
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