|2017 Project Groups|
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|Mark Hill - Lab 1 page|
Here is the Student Page demonstration page I showed in the Practical class.
Use this page to practice editing and don't forget to add a topic to the 2017 Group Project 6 page.
Overall the project was very good and clear. Pictures were well placed and bullet points spaced out information, making the page easy to look at and follow. The layout of the beginning and end sections with the short paragraphs and interspersed bullet points broke up the information and highlighted key facts. The introduction was a good overview of the page, including a quick summary of the anatomy, function, and development of the cerebral cortex.
There were some basic grammatical and spelling errors (e.g. “neurons” is spelled wrong under the subheading “Layer 4”), but for the most part did not take away from the clarity of the page. One sentence, “From there three primary vesicles, there is a further division at the anterior extremity of the medullary canal into five secondary vesicles during week five,” seems to be missing something at the beginning that would increase clarity.
Some pictures had a lot of information in the summary when clicking on them while others lacked sufficient information. Some pictures that could benefit from more information are Corticogenesis of mouse and humans.jpeg, SBH.png, Disorders of Cortical Formation2.png, Symptoms of microcephaly.png, Hemimegalencephaly.png, and SchizencephalicBrain.jpg. These pictures are relevant to the topic and are pretty self-explanatory so this does not take away much clarity from the page but for the parameters of the project, additional summary should be added. The picture Stage22 HPA2L.jpg has good information in the summary but it is oddly structured. FASface.jpeg does not have any copyright information included. Having Gray754.png displayed on the page rather than as a link would look better.
The video describing the functions of the cerebral cortex was a good introduction to that topic. The video was easy to watch and understand. The first video about corpus callosum agenesis was a good introduction to the topic, but the second video about corpus callosum agenesis was long and the lecturer was hard to understand. That subheading would benefit from a brief description of that topic rather that a long video explanation.
The switch from a mix of bullets and short paragraphs to all bullet points in Anatomy of the Cerebral Cortex makes the page look less cohesive. The last bullet point in Layer 4 is hard to understand and the last 2 bullet points in Layer 5 would flow better if they were combined. The information in these sections are good and relatively easy to follow.
Overall the project is very good. The table explaining the timetable of cortex development is a clear way to break down the topic. Breaking down the information of abnormal development into what went wrong in the embryology (e.g. migration problems vs. differentiation problems) highlights importance of embryology in congenital disorders. There is a lot of information about the abnormal development of the cortex but could use some information about past and current research and animal studies. Reference list at the end looks good but the in-text citations of abnormal development should be interspersed with the information rather than all at the beginning.
There is a lot of good information on this page and it is easy to read and understand. The table that introduces the developmental timetable of kidney development is a quick, clear way to introduce the topic. Bolding the anatomical structures is a good way to emphasize the key information of the kidney anatomy.
The information on the page is represented relatively clearly, but a couple of fixes could add clarity. In the description of the Mesonephric stage, the embryological feature, the nephrogenic chord is first introduced as the nephrogenic chord, then referred to as the nephrogenic duct in the next paragraph. Using the same words to describe the same feature makes it less confusing for the reader. Adding a picture to the “Blood Supply” section would also help visualize the kidney vasculature. There is some information about signalling factors in “Nephron Development” that seems oddly placed and may function better in the “Genes Expressed” section. In “Genes Expressed” there is an introduction of two genes, RET and GDNF. RET is clearly the focus of the section but more information about GDNF would benefit this section. Also, making clear what type of molecules RET and GDNF are (receptors, ligands, transcription factors, etc.) and explaining the mechanism of their interaction would make this section clearer.
There are a couple of subheadings at the end of the project that need information in them, pictures that need copyright information and summary when you click on them, in-text citations that need to be added, and basic spelling and grammatical mistakes, all of which can be fixed with some simple editing. The information is solid, the abnormalities section is very good, and the discussion of current research “Can kidney disease be associated with nephron number?” is a good way to end the project. Overall good project.
The project is very good. There is a lot information on the page, there is a good description of each picture when you click on them, and there is a good brief introduction of each topic before going into depth on certain points. Most things are described clearly with pictures to support the information. Ending the project with a glossary of terms adds clarity to the project.
In particular, the “Developmental Signalling Processes” section is excellent. There is a description of where molecules are expressed, what cells they act on, the molecules’ roles in the cell signalling pathway on individual cells, and the molecules’ roles in overall heart development. The table describing different types of FGF signalling is excellent. In this section and throughout the project, there is a lot of description of research that has led to the discovery of the information presented on this page. The section “Animal Models” and “Current Research and Findings” add to this.
There are still a couple things to be fixed before the project is complete. There are some grammatical and spelling errors, particularly in “Proepicardium and Coronary Heart Development” that need to be edited. Some subheadings have nothing under them. Some references need to be fixed. Copyright information is needed when you click on some of the pictures. Instead of just using a paragraph style, emphasizing information by bolding specific words or using bulleted information may make the project easier to read and understand. Near the beginning of the project, a picture of the locations of the truncus arteriosus, bulbus cordis, primitive ventricle, and primitive atrium in the heart tube may add to the description of early development. In addition, a description of valve development could add to the project. Overall very good project.
The developmental timetable and “Development of the eye components” have very clear information that explains the embryology of eye development. However, these sections are currently unfinished and could benefit from some supporting images. Either information could be filled in for Stages 21 and 22, or the 2 rows should be deleted. The event description of Stage 23 “The face is beginning to look human,” is a slightly odd and subjective statement for the table.
The “Anatomy of the Adult Eye” has great drawn pictures to go along with the descriptions. A picture of the supporting structures of the eye would also be beneficial but is not necessary. These pictures need summaries when clicking on them and the files should be renamed from the series of numbers they are currently labeled as.
The “Embryonic Contributions” table is a good, quick, clear way to summarize eye development. You may want to move this section before the developmental timetable along with the “Short overview” description. Both the “Short overview” and “Anatomy of the Adult Eye” sections could be broken up from the long paragraph format to some bulleted information with shorter paragraphs to make the information easier to read and understand. In “Extraocular muscles,” it is mentioned that the inferior oblique muscle has a distinct embryonic origin but that origin is not mentioned.
The table for “Congenital Abnormalities” is a solid way to present the information. The descriptions and epidemiology are short and clear. This section would benefit from another column describing the embryonic origin of these issues and maybe 2 or more abnormalities added to the table.
There are several headings that are either blank or unfinished and some basic grammatical and spelling errors throughout the project. Some picture files should be renamed and a quick summary should be added. A couple more pictures could be added to support the information. A description of the studies that led to the discovery of the information on this page could also be added to improve the project.
The project has a very good lay-out and is written relatively clearly. The table with the developmental timeline and historical discoveries of those developmental stages is excellent and the images that go along with each stage are relevant and have a summary and the appropriate copyright information when you click on them. Some pictures on the page do not have the appropriate copyright information or a summary of them when clicking on them that still needs to be added. In-text citations need to be added to a lot of the sections. There are 7 in-text citations at the beginning of the references section that do not refer to any specific information that should be moved to the appropriate information.
The information in the project is good and you explain studies that have been done to determine this information throughout the project which is an effective way to describe past and current research. There is currently no information under “Current understandings and areas of research” and “Future questions,” but these headings could potentially just be eliminated.
The project is relatively clear but a couple things could be added, changed, or moved to add more clarity. There are some basic grammatical issues and spelling errors that can easily be fixed (e.g. “These branching structures involve are regulated by a network of signalling factors”). In “Developmental signalling processes,” adding whether each signalling molecule is either a ligand, receptor, or transcription factor (e.g. Sox9 is a transcription factor, SHH is a ligand, and HS-GAG is a receptor), what cells these molecules are expressed in, and which cells these molecules act on (if different than where they’re expressed) may make this section clearer. In “Animal Models” the introduction of mouse models would make more sense if there was an explanation of the mice used in the studies (i.e. what strains of mice are used, how are they genetically modified, do these mutations result in a KO, etc.) rather than just the genes being looked at.
Overall good project. Referencing needs to be fixed, summary and copyright information needs to be added to some pictures, and blank subheadings either need information or should be eliminated. The information in the project is good, the lay-out is good, the interspersed information about research is good, and the pictures support the information well.