|2017 Project Groups|
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|Mark Hill - Lab 1 page|
Here is the Student Page demonstration page I showed in the Practical class.
Use this page to practice editing and don't forget to add a topic to the 2017 Group Project 3 page.
• The page has an excellent structure covering a broad variety of topics regarding the cerebral cortex. It was great to see how you also explored abnormalities associated with the cerebral cortex. Furthermore the use of various subheadings and headings related to cerebral cortex development meets criteria 1 and 2 of the assessment.
• The presentation of the wiki page was excellent in that a variety of images, videos and tables were utilized. The use of such sources of information helps present information in a much more clear and concise manner, whilst also providing a thorough explanation to visual learners. Hence the wiki page has an element of teaching at a peer level (criteria 4 is satisfied).
• A large number of references have also been included within the wiki page, a characteristic which helps increase the reliability of information presented. Furthermore, most sources are recent which another great characteristic. Thus, it appears that the group has satisfied criteria 3 for the assessment.
• Each topic appears to show a significant amount of detail which is excellent. In addition, the use of images alongside the text is a great tool as the audience is able to better visualize the concept being described.
Areas of improvement:
• Although you have provided a variety of recent references, to improve you may avoid using sources as old as 1977 as results presented from this study may be outdated.
• It was excellent that the functional areas of the brain were listed, however to improve you may wish to elaborate on the specific functions of these areas. You may also explore how abnormalities of these areas during development may impact upon the behaviour of the individual following birth
• Whilst a variety of topics have been covered, you may wish to also describe the importance of signaling throughout the process of cortical development. For example, you may investigate different growth factors and receptors involved in the process.
• Another possible improvement would be to perhaps include a timeline of different researchers who contributed to the in-depth understanding of the developing cortex that we have today. You may also describe what each researcher discovered.
• In order to completely satisfy criteria 5, you may wish to conduct further research beyond the scope of formal teaching activities. For example you may explore the contribution of animal models towards our understanding of cortical development.
• The wiki page appears to explore a variety of topics regarding the development of the kidney, ranging from topics such as nephrogenesis, ascension of the kidneys, the importance of gene expression in kidney development and also abnormalities associated with development. Furthermore, all topics are relevant to kidney development (criteria 1). In addition a variety of images and tables have been utilized alongside the written-text (criteria 2). This helps present information to students who prefer to learn visually.
• Within the wiki page, a broad variety of references have been included, all of which appear to be recent. All sources included appear to be correctly cited and referenced in-text, thus the authors of the page have clearly satisfied criteria 3.
• It was also great how the authors have not only discussed abnormalities associated with development, but have also investigated current research being conducted into this particular area of embryonic development. Thus, the authors are on track to fulfilling criteria 5 of the assessment. A possible area to investigate may be to examine whether certain abnormalities may be treated through the application of stem cell therapy for example.
Areas of improvement:
• The authors may wish to include videos which may help reinforce information presented within the wiki page. Videos may revolve around the stages of development of the kidney and may appeal to peers who prefer a learning style focused on visual explanation of concepts (criteria 4).
• The authors may also explore research previously conducted into this field which has allowed our understanding of renal development to grow. Thus authors may include a timeline showing discoveries over the years which have contributed to our understanding.
• The topic labelled “blood supply” should also include images to perhaps show the vascular map of arteries and veins which branch out towards the kidney.
• Authors may also wish to create a subheading titled “signaling” in order to describe the signaling processes involved in renal development. Another key improvement would be for the authors to provide a more detailed description of the genes involved in renal development, very few genes have been listed under this subheading.
• Authors of the wiki page have covered a variety of topics regarding eye development. It was great how the authors have included a general overview of eye development followed by a description of specific components within the eye, this definitely helped add depth to your wiki page was also satisfying criteria 1 of the assessment outline.
• The authors of the page have also included a number of images and tables to help present information in a more clear and concise manner. The use of a table to describe the stages of eye development was excellent as it helped simplify the entire process (criteria 2).
• It was great to see hand drawn diagrams within the wiki page. These diagrams helped simplify the overall anatomy of the eye to audiences who may not have a background in science, thus it is excellent that the page focuses on teaching at the peer level (criteria 4).
• It is also great that the authors have included a glossary to help define words which may not be familiar with all audiences.
Areas of improvement:
• To improve, the authors may have included a greater number of images whilst also including videos. More images may have been included under the heading “development of the eye components” to help reinforce the information already included. In addition, certain subheadings under this heading may include a greater description. For example, the subheading “Iris” may include a greater description of how the iris comes to develop. In addition, the authors of this wiki page may have also included videos as another visual tool to help explain certain processes described.
• In addition, it appears that certain areas of the wiki page do not include references to cite certain portions of information included. For example, the section about the anatomy of the eye has utilized a small number of references. In order to completely satisfy criteria 3 of this assessment, authors may wish to correctly cite information included within this section.
• The authors of the wiki page may wish to conduct further research into the subheading “congenital anomalies”. In doing so, a possible area that may be researched is treatment currently available to tackle these anomalies (for example different types of stem cell research being conducted” (criteria 5).
• The wiki page appears to explore a variety of topics regarding the development of the lung, ranging from topics such as lung anatomy and histology, developmental origin andt and also abnormalities associated with development. Furthermore, all topics are relevant to lung development (criteria 1). In addition, a variety of images, tables and movies have been utilized alongside the written-text (criteria 2). This helps present information to students who prefer to learn visually.
• The contents are presented in an appropriate level for the peer. The author for most of the time attempts to provide clarification for acronym accompanied with images and tables that make it easier for the peer learning (criteria 4).
• The authors of this wiki page have also successfully described evidence of significant research relating to basic and applied sciences that goes beyond the formal teaching activities (criteria 5) by exploring animal models that have contributed to our understanding of lung development. The authors have made an excellent start by describing mouse models with respect to different gene signaling processes and their involvement in lung development.
Areas of improvement:
• Authors should provide a more detailed description of the signaling processes involved in lung development (FGF and SHH)., Also, very few signaling pathways have been listed under this subheading.
• The author seems to have some citation errors in the reference list (article 22). Some section (lung anatomy, lung histology, the conducting system, alveolus and current research) seem to not have any in-text citation. The articles on hyaline membrane disease seem very old and they could be outdated.
• Some subheadings are not explained in details (lung cardiovascular) whereas other (current understanding and area of research and future question) lack contents. • Some acronyms lack clarification such as Sox9 and HS-GAG as the author provide a brief description of their role without attempting to explain what they are. Also, some of the drawn images are not very clear for the reviewer.
• Authors may have described the history of research which may have contributed to our current understanding of lung development. For example a timeline may be developed to clearly describe this (criteria 6).
• The authors of this wiki page have included a variety of topics relevant to the development of the cerebellum. Topics range from the normal anatomy of the cerebellum, abnormalities, and the normal developmental process to animal models. Thus it is evident that criteria 1 has been satisfied which is excellent!
• A broad variety of tables and images have been utilized within this wiki page which is another excellent feature that has been included. Not only has this enhanced the presentation of the page, but the images serve as a visual aid in assisting in the explanation of certain concepts to peers (particularly those who are visual learners) (criteria 2 and 4 satisfied). For example the use of images was utilized to help simplify the explanation regarding the vesicles that development.
• It also appears that authors have included a broad variety of references in-text to cite all information utilized. Most source utilized appear to be recent and all have been correctly cited (criteria 3).
• The authors of this page have also explored evidence of significant research relating to basic and applied sciences that extends beyond the formal teaching activities (criteria 5) by exploring avenues including animal models and how the use of animal models have contributed to our understanding of the cerebellum. Authors of the page have also explored abnormalities of cerebellar development which was excellent
Areas of improvement:
• In order to improve, authors may wish to expand on different animal models utilized. • The authors of this wiki page may also wish to utilize videos as another visual tool to aid in the presentation of content included.
• Another area of improvement would be to cite sources that are of a more recent date, rather than citing sources from the 1970s. The reason being is that such sources may include information that is currently outdated, thus the page may be providing inaccurate information about cerebellar development.
• Authors of the page may have also covered certain topics in greater depth. For example the heading titled “Cell signaling in cerebellar development” may have been subdivided into different types of genes and signaling factors involved in cerebellar development. Authors may then elaborate on each gene/signaling factor. This will help enhance presentation whilst also improving the readability of the information presented.