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|Mark Hill - Lab 1 page|
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The layout is looking very good, pictures could be a little smaller. I like the choice of headings, they explain well what is going to be talked about. I feel like you need to add headings like animal models and current research needs to be fixed but I’m sure that’s what is intended. I have some minor points for some of the headings: Early development: Spelling: Rhomboncephalon, and the instead of three at the beginning of a paragraph. Overall this heading was covered well Development of cerebral cortex: With images, you can add figure titles and this could make your page flow better!! Maybe expand a bit more on the key developmental zones in the human cortex, a brief explanation of what happens could help. The table is very well explained, however for E50-55 I can’t see a reference for all the information, also for the picture in the table for E50-55, you haven’t copied the copyright information so you should add that so it can be used in the page and also add the student template. I really like the drawn picture, but again a figure description would be helpful. This section is very well done. Anatomy of the cerebral cortex Some great points but needs to be broken up into paragraphs. Your Wikipedia link for the image is a good image however you should find the original, I recognize it from Cajal’s drawings so I think it could be in a paper about the cerebellum with Cajal. You have good ideas for this heading, also maybe add another image. Functions of the cerebral cortex For functional areas, I think a 2 sentence description of each area would be good and maybe a picture for reference. Abnormalities Intext referencing would be better. For images, add the student template to each!! Im not entirely sure how I feel about the youtube screenshots as images, maybe use one but try and find some in research articles aswell. Overall, I think you’ve done a really good job at summarizing abnormalities.
I believe the headings chosen cover a sufficient amount of points you need in order to describe kidney development! Referencing needs to be changed, its easy to use the code  and that automatically makes a reference for you! When describing position, explain what retroperitoneal means, its not commonly known and also Thoracic 12 (T12) so people know what T12 refers too. For images, you need to find the copyright information and reference them properly, Mark has step by step instructions on what needs to be included in the image description. There aren’t many references in the first section of the page, it would benefit if you included some. Under nephrogenesis, point 3, you can find the articles pubmed ID and add the reference in that way instead of manually doing it. For developmental abnormalities, I feel like this could be explained better, it gets technical straight away and this can become quite confusing. Current research and questions need to be worked on but I’m sure that’s whats intended. Overall I think the content on this page is very relevant to kidney development and it was interesting to read. The two major things you should fix are image copyright and references and intext referencing.
Introduction is very good and explains a lot. Under the heading “Primary heart field and heart tube formation” – the reference at the bottom should be removed. Secondary heart field and cardiac looping: First sentence doesn’t really make sense, maybe switch it up a bit. Under current research and findings you have labelled a figure figure 1, when it is not the first figure in your wiki page, seems a little confusing. Images also don’t have appriopriate copyright info, description and referencing. Also figure 2 is placed right in the middle of the sentence, maybe put it to the right so it doesn’t interrupt reading. Information could be formatted better under the heading atrial septal defect! Maybe some subheadings for the different defects? Same goes with the ventricular septal defect, its easier to read when things are broken up. Glossary is very good!
All the information written on your page is very well written and easily understood. Images could be labelled better, add a figure to each of them as when you are referring to figure 1 and 2 in your writing, the images aren’t labelled so its hard to tell what image you are referring to. With references, I don’t like how there is a bunch at the end of some headings? Could be because you still need to read them but looks messy. There is an overwhelming amount of information, so good job on doing so much research but it was quite tedious to read, not sure if this much information is needed? But it is very hard to fault your wiki page so this might be a bit picky.
Reading through this page was very interesting and informative however I have a few points that could be adjusted to improve on your page. When inserting an image, adding a figure and brief description on the images would be useful. The timeline is good but there is no reference so it definitely needs one. When reading through all the other tables, references need to be used more as it isn't that easy to figure out what articles you have used to get your information. More work needs to be done to fill the headings under development of eye components and if more images were added it would be useful. Abnormalities could have a bit more of an explanation written as well. Your wiki page is looking good, I would suggest a heading on animal models would provide some good information and fit well with your page! I also haven’t read anything that tells us about signaling, this should have its own heading and should be explained quite well as it is an important part of development. With your figures, it would be nice if you referred to them throughout your text more, and integrated them with the headings. Although this page is a work in progress, the information written is useful and easy to understand.
This wiki page is very informative and good to read! When reading I noticed that the images don’t have a figure number, although this isn’t necessary, it can make it easy to refer to figures in text and therefore explain them better. For the heading lung histology, you can add proper dot points by adding an asterix before the information, this will make your page present better. Both headings future questions and current research need to be finished as they are incomplete. Using self drawn pictures makes your page easy to follow and understand, this is a great feature of your page. Copyright information is added well for the most part, however I found some images under the heading “Developmental signaling processes” which didn’t have any copyright information or an appropriate description, also make sure the student template is added at the end of every image description. I particularly enjoyed the timeline, it is very well written and is easy to understand. Good job on the project thus far.
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