Peer Review Assessment Comments
Be careful in how the sentences are expressed for example in the introduction ‘the cerebral cortex is actually the outermost layer’; avoid using ‘actually’ in this sentence. Don’t forget to remove the student numbers from the posts. Minor grammatical errors; no use of commas in long sentences. The images do include copyright however the team has forgotten to place the Student Image Template that is required. The team should add a small description of the images that are on their webpage so readers will see immediately what the image is showing. The team could do a further questions subheading or an animal model subheading to explore more on the research of the Cerebral Cortex.
Subheadings and content that have been used show a good understanding of the topic area. The use of dot points where necessary are done well which makes the project easier to understand and read through. The use of tables to demonstrate the ‘Timeline of Corticogenesis’ is done comprehensively; maybe an image for each day that is explained should be added to show consistency (as only the last row has an image). The team has used their own diagrams which shows that the team was innovative in displaying their research. The references used are cited correctly, however, there are links at the bottom where they need to fix up and place it under references.
References should be cited correctly, i.e. don’t leave the links in the paragraphs and use proper citation. The images used should include references, copyright statements as well as the Student Image template required. If there are copyright images the team could be innovative and use their own diagrams to display structures. Use references for the ‘Timeline of Kidney Embryology’ to show that a variety of sources were used to complete the table. Current Research and Future Questions subheading is incomplete. Glossary of terms could be used to explain certain words, for example explaining in simple terms what GDNF and RET are.
Subheadings and content that have been used show a good understanding of the topic area. The team has bolded important words in relation to the kidney structure. The team has also placed a description under the images which allows readers to understand what the image is showing. The use of a table of ‘Timeline of Kidney’ allows readers to understand the content of the wikipage easily (maybe add images to the table). The team has shown comprehensive research; however, they need to show more referencing of sources to display the research that they have done.
Don’t forget to remove the hyperlinks that are under ‘Heart’ at the beginning of the page. Remove student numbers from the page. Add a brief description under images so that readers will understand what the image is showing. Remember to move references that are written in some sections to the ‘References’ subheading. The Notch Pathway is incomplete.
Subheadings and content that have been used show a good understanding of the topic area. The use of a table for the ‘Development Timeline’ shows the teams innovativeness. The use of simple sentences in the table allows readers to understand content simply. References have been done well, they are cited properly. The team have used their own images to show their understanding of the heart. The images that they have used have been properly cited: there are references, copyright statements and the Student Image template. Thorough description of abnormal development, animal models and current research which shows the comprehensive research that was done for the heart. The use of Glossary of Terms is helpful to readers who may not understand what some terms are.
The team should provide a brief description of what the images are on their page so readers will understand immediately what it is. The team could use some images to show Caregie Stages, but the section is yet to be completed. An explanation of the ‘Timeline of embryonic development’ table would be beneficial to help readers understand what the table is explaining. More resources could be used for the Anatomy of the Adult Eye so that the team has shown to have used a variety of sources and have done plenty of research. There are incomplete sections. The team could include current research and animal models as extra subheadings.
Subheadings and content that have been used show a good understanding of the topic area. The team has used their own images to display their learning. The references have been correctly cited. The use of tables helps readers understand what the content is about, and is easy to follow for readers. Some of the images have been cited correctly; they have references, copyright statements and the Student Image template. However, some of the images don’t have the Student Image template. The abnormalities subheading was done well with the use of images and references.
Future questions and current research subheadings are incomplete. Don’t forget to add references, copyright statements and the student image template to each of the images that have been used on the wikipage. References should be used on Lung Histology to show the research that has been done. The animal models section is comprehensive but there are barely any references to show where the information was found.
Subheadings and content that have been used show a good understanding of the topic area. The team have used their own images to show their understanding. The team has used images in the ‘Developmental timeline’ table which shows comprehensive research. The images have brief descriptions below them, hence readers will be able to understand what the image is displaying. Important words in relation to the lung have been bolded. The abnormal development section is done comprehensively with references and images. References were cited properly, however there is an error on reference 20.
|2017 Project Groups|
|Group 1||Group 2||Group 3||Group 4||Group 5||Group 6|
|Mark Hill - Lab 1 page|
Here is the Student Page demonstration page I showed in the Practical class.
Use this page to practice editing and don't forget to add a topic to the 2017 Group Project 6 page.
We can type anything here ...
Chicken embryo E-cadherin and P-cadherin in gastrulation
- <pubmed>PMC2775156 </pubmed>