|2017 Project Groups|
|Group 1||Group 2||Group 3||Group 4||Group 5||Group 6|
|Mark Hill - Lab 1 page|
Here is the Student Page demonstration page I showed in the Practical class.
Group 1 - Cerebral Cortex
- Overall, the page is well structured and relatively easy to follow with the headings and subheadings relevant to the topic area (embryology of the cerebral cortex).
- The introduction was short and concise, which provided a relevant amount of background knowledge before delving straight into the development.
- Perhaps the Anatomy and Functions of the cerebral cortex could be put before the development so that it ties in with the introduction.
- The use of dot points under Anatomy and Function of the Cerebral Cortex was excessive and gives off an unfinished feel. Perhaps you could add in a couple of images to make these dot points easier to understand. Also, it might be better to use the * function to create these dot points.
- The use of the table on the "Timeline of Corticogenesis” was quite clever and made it easier to understand, however I suggest that you add photos in E30, E31-32 and E40-45 since there seems to only be one photo in E50-55. The page is lacking a "further questions" section which would be quite informative in understanding the research gap to date.
- I think the Disorders was nicely done and was very informative. The use of images in the left and right side of the page made it aesthetically pleasing to read. However this section lacks references, which I think you should add to avoid plagiarism.
- The images and videos that are on the page are very relevant to the topic, which aided in understanding the content. However perhaps you could label them using "Figure 1", or "Table 1" etc as well as putting an appropriate description under the image/video. Also, the link of an wiki image under Layers was not inserted properly, so be sure to check that for next time.
- References were inconsistent throughout the page, however most were done properly.
Group 3 - Heart
- Overall, this page has a good structure and was enjoyable to read. The headings and subheadings were clear and made it easier to understand the developmental process of the Heart.
- Perhaps it would be better to include relevant background information of the heart (such as blood flow and structure) before delving into the developmental process straightaway.
- There is a good amount of images (and well-drawn images) accompanying the text which aided in understanding the content. However some were not labelled, such as in Developmental Origin where in the text you referred to the images “In figure 2…” and “See figure 4” but the images were not labelled so it was difficult to tell which images you were referring to.
- The table on the Development Timeline was short and concise which was good however it would be better to insert images in the different stages to make it easier to visualise.
- Most parts were cited correctly and properly, however some parts need to be fixed; the Pubmed article reference by “Antoon Moorman” appears in several sections of the page and needs to be deleted. Most sections had a good amount of references, however some sections weren't cited at all such as "Current Research and Findings and "Cardiac Stem Cells".
- Some sections were left blank (The Notch Pathway, Sonic Hedgehog, and Retinoic Acid) which gives the page an unfinished feel, however I assume they will be completed over time. Glossary of terms was clever and made the content easier to understand (the heart is quite complicated to understand). Well done overall.
Group 4 - Eye
- The page has an overall good structure, was very easy to follow and has a good feel in the developmental process of the eye. However the page seems to be unfinished, since there are a lot of blank areas under the subheadings (Retina, Cornea, Aqueous Chambers, Choroid and Sclera, Eyelids, Lacrimal Glands) and tables (Carnegie Stages 21 and 22). It would be a good idea to start creating the glossary so you can define difficult words such as “collagenIX" and "tenasin-C".
- The Anatomy of the Adult Eye was short, concise and quite informative. Perhaps the images need to be redrawn since the layers were hard to distinguish, and they need to be labelled with “taken from…”.
- The use of tables were very helpful and makes the content easier to understand. The table on Carnegie Stages was very informative, however it would be better to insert some images to visually aid the readers. Also, this table seems to be missing references.
- Congenital anomalies section is a very important part of the topic, and I feel that it lacks information. Instead of putting it in a table perhaps it would be better give each anomaly their own subheading, and from there you can elaborate on it more.
- Although references were done correctly, a lot of sections seem to be missing citations ("Supporting Structures" and "Anterior Structure" under Anatomy). Overall, well done so far!
Group 5 - Lung
- This page is very informative, the headings and subheadings were highly appropriate and made the development process much easier to follow.
- I liked how you provided the Anatomy, Histology and Vasculature of an Adult Lung, which provided a good amount of background knowledge before exploring the developmental process. Perhaps you could label the images with “Figure 1/2/3 ...” so you could easily refer to them in-text, such as “Figure 1 shows the anatomy of the adult lung” instead of “This diagram shows the anatomy of the adult lung”. Although this section was very informative, it seems to lack references.
- The table on the Developmental Timeline was perfectly done, as it ties in the development with historical discoveries and had appropriate images to provide visual aid. Furthermore, this table has a good amount of references on it. Well done!
- Although most sections were cited correctly, there is quite a few sections which did not have references at all (see “Structure of Respiratory Network” and “Lung Anatomy and Histology”) so it would be good to add them in to avoid plagiarism.
- A good amount of images were used (images were very well drawn and easy to understand) and they were accompanied with relevant information. The Abnormal Development section was very informative, however it would be better to insert more images in this section as it is quite an important topic.
- Future questions and Glossary were left blank and would be very useful if they were done but I assume that they would be completed with time. Overall, the page seems to have a good amount of information on it so far, well done.
Group 6 - Cerebellum
- This page was easy to follow and had relatively good flow, with relevant headings and subheadings relating to the development of the cerebellum. There were some sections under Anatomy of the cerebellum relating to the development (see Neural Development) which seemed out of place, so I suggest to put it under the Development section to improve flow.
- Basic anatomy of the cerebellum contained a good amount of information, which provided relevant background knowledge before jumping into the development.
- Images were nicely chosen and was very relevant to the content, and they were also cited properly. Perhaps you could add in some images in the table of Cerebellar Nuclei to make it easier to visualise.
- The section Cerebellum is informative but too wordy, making it difficult to read through. Adding in a couple of images in between points would making it easier to read and understand.
- The table of "Cerebellum Developmental Weeks” First Trimester was nicely done as it was simple and easy to understand, and had relevant images to visually aid the reader. Perhaps you could add in images in the Second Trimester table to balance it out.
- There is a vast amount of references used, and they were done properly.
- A "Further questions" section is needed to address any research gaps as well as explore more information on the Cerebellum. So far, well done!