Talk:2015 Group Project 4
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|1||The key points relating to the topic that your group allocated are clearly described.||The project has identified the key topic points.|
|2||The choice of content, headings and sub-headings, diagrams, tables, graphs show a good understanding of the topic area.||The overall sub-heading structure is appropriate. There is no history/timeline for this disorder. While there is a map of world infertility, there is no breakdown as to how Polycystic Ovarian Syndrome contributes to these statistics.|
|3||Content is correctly cited and referenced.||Citations and referencing are correctly formatted. Though I cant easily determine/discriminate in the text which are papers are reviews and original research.|
|4||The wiki has an element of teaching at a peer level using the student's own innovative diagrams, tables or figures and/or using interesting examples or explanations.||Single student diagram included, useful but not novel. Some images are useful in understanding the topic, though many are without useful information associated with the file summary.|
|5||Evidence of significant research relating to basic and applied sciences that goes beyond the formal teaching activities.||Includes some current research and findings. The topic of obstructive and genetic disorders is not covered properly in the project.|
|6||Relates the topic and content of the Wiki entry to learning aims of embryology.||Related to embryology (testis, endocrine, spermatozoa development, fertilisation).|
|7||Clearly reflects on editing/feedback from group peers and articulates how the Wiki could be improved (or not) based on peer comments/feedback. Demonstrates an ability to review own work when criticised in an open edited wiki format. Reflects on what was learned from the process of editing a peer's wiki.||There is evidence of group discussion and interaction. Many peer review suggested changes were not incorporated in response to their feedback.|
|8||Evaluates own performance and that of group peers to give a rounded summary of this wiki process in terms of group effort and achievement.||There is evidence of group discussion and interaction. At least one group member not actively contributing and another had contributed late and only briefly.|
|9||The content of the wiki should demonstrate to the reader that your group has researched adequately on this topic and covered the key areas necessary to inform your peers in their learning.||Videos were useful and gave a “commercial” description related to the topic. The second and third were more relevant. There needed to be more evidence of researching the topic in depth. Project tables wire clear and useful.|
|10||Develops and edits the wiki entries in accordance with the above guidelines.||Table named “Classifications of Valsalva manoeuvre” is not an appropriate title, as this is not what is shown in the table.|
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--Mark Hill (talk) 11:20, 25 September 2015 (AEST) OK I discussed this with your group in last week's lab. you have not shown animal models, graphics, histology, media etc to really build your project page. The introduction does not give me a clear idea of the scope of the project. Not ready for peer review.
Hey guys, I have just had a really quick look on PubMed and I found a good starting article. Its a review article (I'm pretty sure) so I'm not sure if we can use it, but it discusses some interesting genetic causes of male infertility and also references a lot of primary articles.
I can't seem to view anything but the first page of the article but the introduction gives a good idea on what male infertility is and how it arises. At the moment I have found 2 research articles that address factors that can increase male fertility. Although they do not address male infertility conditions specifically, in the discussion they imply that these methods can be applied to men who have them such as oligospermia and azoospermia. I feel as though we can use these articles when discussing alternative therapies for successful conception. Please have a read and share your opinions!
PMID 22958644 - note that you can only view the condensed version of this article
PMID 26097523 - you can view the whole article on biomed (subheadings in the discussion particularly addresses male infertility)
Hey guys, it was pretty hard finding research articles from Pubmed regarding the epidemiology of male infertility. For now, I have found an article about sperm extraction which I thought could be an alternative for treatments. However I can't view the full article without paying, but the abstract from Pubmed seems to sum it up. So, I came across a research article addressing the epidemiology and aetiology of male infertility, through Pubmed it doesn't have a direct link to the full PDF article however I linked it you guys on Facebook so have a read!
Hello everyone! To get started, I just added a few headings on the page where you can add your research/review articles. Feel free to add more subheadings or change the wording of the titles - I'm sure we will need to as we research more. From looking at other groups' pages, I think it is also important we add a bit of 'Background Information" regarding the process of spermatogenesis and how any abnormalities can cause infertility so we can all look for articles as we go. Remember we are targeting this towards students like us, so a bit of key background info is essential.
I just posted the articles that I found on male infertility. It was kind of hard to find ones because I stuck to studies in humans- but i found some good ones that were studies on rats (not sure if we can use them) and also some good secondary or review articles that we could use as background information maybe? So I'll just post the PMID's here..
- PMID 26303086
- PMID 23725463
- PMID 25160621
- PMID 25142466
Not sure if we are review articles are any good, but I thought that it's also important to talk about "detecting abnormalities". I came across this review article which talks about the "male genital tract - colour dopple ultrasound" is a useful tool to detect impaired reproductive health.
Good thinking! If anyone comes across more articles regarding this, please post them up! I'll add a 'diagnosis' sub-heading to the page
Hey guys, found a couple of articles describing different methods of ARTs for male infertility:
These 2 talk about Intrauterine Insemination (IUI) PMID 26294874 PMID 26288981
Also, another potential sub-heading to research might be the risks involved different ARTs E.g. the following article about the prevalence of birth defects after a number of different male-related ARTs PMID 26265143
That sounds good. I think mentioning risks are important to show what is successful and what isnt. Feel free to add it under the "ART" heading (as a sub-heading)
Hey I found this article that discusses some ARTs for infertile men. Its not a bad read and has info on two different methods, Intracytoplasmic morphologically selected sperm injection (IMSI) and conventional intracytoplasmic sperm injection (cICSI). You can read the full text on biomod
LOOK! This is a really good review article that talks about causes, diagnosis AND treatments. I recommend everyone to read it!
To start, I think some of your subheadings are a bit unnecessary, for example, you could get away without having the subheading “background information” and just having the sub-subheadings as subheadings below your intro. Whilst some subheadings are good as it helps break down the info in the table of contents, it makes the actual page difficult to read and follow.
Great use of images on the page. There are many, without it cluttering the page and they are simple and relevant. However, the pictures you have used under “background information” appear to be a bit lifeless and complex. Perhaps using more simplified images with some colours would help liven up the section as well as allow people who use this page, with less scientific knowledge than you, to understand what they are seeing. They are important images as they set the basis for the rest of the page. It would also be good to see a hand-drawn image on the page.
Your use of tables is also great, it really helps to break down the information. I would suggest however, you include a little more information and references under the section “male infertility disorders”. It is a big vague and there are no citations. Your list of references is incredible and you should be commended on that. It shows a great deal of research has gone into this page. Your citations appear to be correctly done throughout the page. Your “Causes of fertility” section is done really well and is very thorough. The video accompanying it is good to as it is easy to understand and explanatory. Your “risk factors and prevention” heading could use more work. I would suggest actually splitting them up into two separate headings and really delving more into prevention and how to handle infertility.
Your “treatment” section is really well done and thorough. I would suggest however, to make it easier to read, that you simplify some of your paragraphs into bullet points. A glossary section may also be useful for people reading this page with a lesser degree of embryology knowledge than you or I. I will say, this page has covered its chosen topic well and has attacked it from an embryologically focused angle. Lastly I would suggest including a section on animal models and the literature for the more advanced student.
Very impressive work so far guys! Your page covers a comprehensive topic very well, without focussing too much on certain subheadings at the expense of others. Your use of both tables and images is excellent so far. All necessary copyright information seems to be present for the images that you have uploaded. It's good to see that you have also included a video to give some variety to the media on your page. The 'background information' gives context to the issues which you discuss and though it might not be of great use for someone familiar with embryology, it would be a great help to those with no experience in this field and is therefore useful in establishing the topic of male infertility.
The only things that could be changed to improve your wiki page is perhaps altering the location of tables and pictures on your page. For example all pictures are located on the right side of the page, although not a significant issue, becomes slightly monotonous as one progresses through the page. It may be worth alternating pictures between left and right to mix things up a little bit and improve the overall flow of the page. It might also be worth including a short video underneath the 'surgical treatments' subheading to give a visual example of some of the techniques discussed.
Furthermore a subheading on future research could possibly be included under the 'treatments' subheading to give the reader information on techniques and therapies which may come to prominence in the near future.
Your wiki page thus far is very impressive! Excellent work so far.
Probably the most enjoyable page to read, thus far.
• Great introduction; straight to the point and easy to understand.
• Your information is organised under appropriate subheadings, making your page easy to read and follow.
• Your “Types of Male Infertility” table is great! You have provided clear definitions of each condition and the use of colour makes the information stand out.
• Appropriate referencing throughout.
• Great audio-visual sources, especially the video.
• Your page looks even better than a Wikipedia page! A lot of time and effort has gone into it.
• A glossary at the end of the page would be great, even though you have explained a lot of the concepts in your text. This way the reader does not have to skim through your page to find a term and they can go straight to the glossary.
• Information under IVF and IUI is absent in “Male Infertility Treatments.” I am not sure if these were meant to be deleted or text will be added later.
It is evident that you have worked fantastically as a team and you have done a lot of research. Each topic is covered comprehensively and aided by a table, image or diagram, making the topic more appealing to the reader. Well done!
The wikipage is very well organised and the headings, subheadings and tables made everything easy to follow. I particularly liked the blue theme you kept with all the tables, it is very aesthetically pleasing. In terms of content the background information provided a clear overview of the subject especially the information about the physiology of fertility in males which laid down the foundation some basic knowledge surrounding male fertility under normal circumstances which I found useful in grasping other concepts throughout the page. The page is filled with an extensive amount of content and along with the long list of references I was given the impression of good understanding of the topic and commendable effort placed into the research.
One thing I found that wasn’t quite compatible with your page was the inclusion of the video in the ‘Causes of infertility section’. Although I do agree that it is a very good video, it had little information surrounding male infertility and was more about infertility in general. Perhaps a video exclusively about male infertility would be more suitable for your page.
As for some additional improvements, it would be beneficial to include a glossary to explain some difficult terms that would help the audience gain a better understanding of the content. Also, the addition of a hand-drawn image would also be nice. A suggestion would be to exchange your existing ‘components and structure of spermatozoa’ image with a more simplified and schematic diagram of the structure of sperm.
Overall, I enjoyed reading about male infertility and the page is coming together very nicely.
The introduction is a really important part of the project so it’s important that you get that down. The introduction is well written but it is not done yet as it does not give me a clear idea of the scope of the project. You need to explain the topic in more depth to give readers overall understanding of the male infertility. Maybe think about adding an image to make it a bit more appealing.
Overall this is a well-produced project so far, very impressed. First thing noticeable on the page is the amount of information you have which is great. Only minor changes to polish up some sections are needed which I will explain as we go on. The project as a whole is not text heavy with some good images, tables, diagrams and a short video included which again are helpful in guiding the information. The table in “Diagnosis” section is great and really well done. One thing you could maybe do here is add a few diagrams or images related. I know you have added 2 images down below but I think it’s something that might make it even easier to follow. Try to add more related images to the content of the table. For the “Male infertility disorders”, I believe you can find more information and add to the table as this topic is a big vague and broad. Most of the sections have great amount of detail with a number of in text citations and this is great to see except for the table used in “Male infertility disorders”. Try to fix this up as citations should be carried through the entire page. Other than that, all the citations formatted correctly and it is good that all the references appear in one long list at the end of the page. Well done!
Some sections like “Intrauterine Insemination (IUI)” or “IVF” seems to be untouched. I’m assuming you are still in the process of adding content. However, the “Treatments” section is extensive and well researched. Good job.
To sum up, in terms of improvement, my suggestions are:
• There is no hand drawn image yet .You may only have 1-2 weeks to complete this project so don’t leave it until last minute.
• Add more related videos to create the balance.
• The project could benefit from having a ‘Glossary’ list so that viewers can understand some uncommon words.
• You have not shown animal model so this can be a potential subheading as well as “future research” or “current research”. Just some tips, when researching on pubmed, there's an option to look at recent articles by customising dates to say 2012-onwards
• In text-citation
• Simplify some of your paragraphs into bullet points. This can be done for “Causes of Infertility” or “Treatments”.
• Finish those untouched topics
Overall, the project page is interesting, easy to comprehend and follow, however certain changes should be addressed and more information added.
I’ll begin by commending you on a well contructed wikipage with a great balance of texts and figures. You have used a great variety of supporting resources which complement your text well and aid in the teaching and the understanding of your key points which you have chosen well and mostly covered sufficiently. I particularly liked that you included a graph, (since you are the first project I see with one) and your widespread use of tables which breaks up the text whilst teaching your content well. Good job on being consistent in using the same colour and formatting in your tables. Your explanations are clear and extensive with the main points covered well. Your topic appears to be well research with a thorough list of references and your citations are correct.
While you have included a great table on the types of infertility in males with a brief explanation of each, I feel like this should be elaborated on further. Also, your background information is well written however I feel it is too abrupt. You can include an introductory sentence or paragraph to your subheadings. While it is great that you included a video, I don’t feel like it is relevant to where you have placed it under the causes heading. Since it is more of an overview of infertility in general you can move it to the beginning of the page if you would like to keep it or choose a different video.
While I did say your explanations in general are well written, some areas need more focus, such as your explanation of Varicocele, while you have said that varicocele leads to infertility and explained what is was, it wasn’t clear to me why it causes infertility. Also you should add more significant research beyond the teaching aspect by including some studies conducted and animal models. You can contribute further to the teaching and understanding of your topic by adding your own innovative, drawn diagrams to your great selection of files already added. Just a final formatting point, your images need a higher resolution, most of them are unclear and the words are not very readable. You can edit this by increasing the current 300px resolution to the appropriate pixels.
Great progress overall, good luck with the rest!
The topic is well investigated in this project wiki. It is excellent that you also include some background information on the structure and development of spermatozoa, which would help readers without knowledge in this field.
Images are properly cited and referenced. They make the page looked refreshing. Tables are used wisely to summarize information on ‘male infertility disorders’, but will need some more in-text referencing with the table contents.
Paragraphs are written very well. There are great efforts in rewriting and summarizing. It will be better if the texts can be simplified by some diagrams or lists, which will be easier for readers to get through. Overall, this project wiki is an excellent work.
The website is very well organized and contains a lot of researched information and content. The introduction gives a short and precise definition of male infertility and let’s the reader know what to expect from the website. Overall the order of the headings and subheadings is very logical. To start off with explaining the healthy male physiology is a smart way to allow readers with less knowledge about the topic to understand the website. The blue theme of the tables is very coherent and the recurrent incorporation of the tables is alternative to plain text. The “treatment” heading has a lot of information ranging from traditional to Western medicine, which shows that the topic was very well researched.
In addition, it is good to see that at the end of the treatment section (upon completion) the page will give a direct link to ART. The referencing of the website and the images is correct. Here and there are some paragraphs or tables that are not referenced yet (Classifications of Valsalva manoeuvre, Intro. of “Diagnosis”). The amount of references is extensive showing again that the topic has been researched quite well. The images are very useful, for understanding the content of the website. Particularly the diagrams explaining the Varicocele and the mechanisms of Lycopene Treatment clarify a lot. The timeline of the development of gonadotropin preparations is also a great way to incorporate bits of the history of your topic without spending too much text on it.
It might be useful to add another heading about current research and a glossary to help readers to understand the website. It is really great that you added a video to your website, particularly in the beginning as it will introduce to topic to readers and ease them into the topic. However, it might be reasonable to look for a video that only focuses on male infertility. If that cannot be found it would not be too bad, as the video is still relevant to the topic overall. Moreover, try to add a self-drawn image, maybe in the treatments part for the surgical interventions?.
Firstly, you have done an exceptionel job in creating such a well organised page with the right amount of images and videos. It is also evident that a lot of effort was taken to make sure each section is covered comprehensively which is a mark of great teamwork.
You have added images and videos at the right places to make it easier for us to absorb the information, however I could not find an original image. Perhaps you could use a flowchart from one of the existing images to make your own simplified version using Word.
The sub-headings are very appropriate and ensure that there are no big blocks of text. My only suggestion would be to cut down on the background information regarding spermatozoa and spermatogenesis. While this is important in providing us with an insight into male reproduction, a paragraph at most would suffice. Under Male Infertility Treatments with ARTs, there are a few sub-sub headings that don't have any text underneath them.
I really liked the use of a table under Risks and Prevention as it breaks the monotonous style of reading paragraphs of text.
At the end of the page, it would be helpful to include a glossary as there are a few terms that are hard to understand.
I really commend you on being able to produce such a well crafted page that the readers can enjoy going through. Great team work!
This page is really with high quality. The key points relating to the topic are clearly described. The page is organized very well which is neat and easy to read. The headings and subheadings are appropriate and easy to follow. The video is relative to the content and the images are well chosen. The choice of background color of the tables is pretty good which makes the page nice but still easy to read. The video is well referenced. Other references and citations are appropriate as well. I will make the following suggestions:
1. A glossary at the end of page will help those without background knowledge understanding the topic easier.
2. An animal model and the current research may be included in your page.
3. A hand-drawn image can be added.
Overall, this is a good teamwork and you have made a great page.
I would like to say great work of find substantial information and images to go along with your wikipage. From the table of contents there seems to be a lot of topics being addressed and with your use of subheadings, it makes navigating the page much easier. The short introduction described the basic meaning of male infertility well as well as the inclusion of some basic statistics is a nice bit of information however it would be nice to have some information regarding what your wikipage will be covering in general
The background information is very useless as it provides the reader with some basic knowledge of where the male reproductive system and its components come into play in regard to the topic of male infertility. The images used are all referenced appropriately and assists in understanding where each component is located and what they look like. The tabulated data of the different types of male infertility allows the readers to easily understand the different kinds and what their relative symptoms are easily. Good job on that! The use of video is nice to see, it has relevance to your topic.
Regarding information within the section ‘Major Causes of Infertility’, the information provided is awesome, however there just seems to be too much information crammed into small paragraphs which makes it quite draining to read. There are many terms which some readers may not know or understand, so I recommend using a glossary to help sort this problem out maybe simplify the information (if you can) or break up into more paragraphs to make it easier to read and digest. There are some sections which have no information, however I know that these will be filled by the submission date. The large amount of references is indicative of how much work went into the wikipage for your group!
Good work guys!!
This group project is so far the most detailed, it has the most information included. Many topics followed by sub topics followed by even more sub topics is a clear indication of the amount of research they have undergone. Multiple diagrams, YouTube videos, flowcharts, microscopic images, histological slides, ultrasonography, timelines and tables were very useful in supporting the information they have and helps give a clear understanding of male infertility. 68 references included a vast search for research they did which is a general indication of reliability so as the multiple citations used throughout the report.
Lack of a glossary doesn’t help the reader as this report is a general but very large topic, with all the information they have included, the readers are bound to come across a fair amount of words or phrases they will not understand. No symptoms are recorded down, and also in the risk factors and prevention section, only one table is included. Perhaps more information regarding the prevention is required.
Overall the project is done quite well, although if a reader was to judge on its clarity they may find it a bit hard as there is a lot of information which could do with a bit of clarity, possibly but separating, bullet points or tables. A glossary should definitely be added as it plays a very important role for the reader’s benefit.
This Group Project is impressively detailed and provides a comprehensive view of male infertility detailing the normal process as well as the various disorder types and causes. The wikipedia page flows logically, provides excellent summaries and may well be an excellent educational resource. The video chosen is fantastic and tables have been used well to present information quickly.
I find that the Introduction is clear and concise. However, i feel it may be improved further by an introductory visual. Other than that, the page has many relevant diagrams and images. In terms of the 'development of gonadotropin preparations', it does seem a little out of place as it isn't particularly referred to in the text. I understand timelines add a richness to the text and can give perspective, but i feel that it may be of more relevance if given regarding male infertility treatments as a whole, rather than gonadotropin preparations. Of course, you can always have both.
Other than that, I am quite impressed with this wikipedia page. It is referenced well and information is backed with reference to the findings of various studies. A final tip may be to add a simple glossary for ease of reference as opposed to having to scroll back up to the section (e.g. varicocele) to remind oneself of the meaning. However, it should be commended that jargon was defined well throughout the article.
Great work guys, a lot of information in there. Well referenced and easily readable. Nicely broken up with some informative images. Tables are great and make it easy to find information on a big page. And the first embedded video I’ve seen which is nice. Looks like it all the information is there already just a couple of heading to finish off so well done. Stylistically the only things ill pick on are, The numbered list in treatments, doesn’t fit with the formatting of the rest of the page. Just turn them into subheading or tables like the others. Some of the tables are standalone ie. Male infertility disorder that should really have some intro text to them. Also make sure they have a description underneath each one describing what’s in table. And reference of where the information’s coming from. You could add a section on epidemiology/prevalence of types of infertility. But the intro could be enough if you flesh something out in there. Don’t forget to hyperlink some of the important words to the sites glossary and other pages so people can find extra reading or background. And I think you’ll have a really informative page. Fantastic work guys.
- The structure of your page is extremely excellent! It flows very well, all headings and subheadings were chosen really well, the use of tables and diagrams are incredible!
- The heading of “Background information” is VERY extensive, and also concise! The diagram placement is also excellent, and their use is also extremely excellent
- The use of the video to explain the cause of infertility is absolutely amazing, it makes your page look good, keeps your explanation short, concise, and readable, and it also engages the audience
- Each subheading under “Causes” is also very well outlined and explained, there is a lot of information there, and it is sure whatever information the reader may need would be found on your page as it has covered and explained a lot
Overall, all I have for your group are good comments, as I couldn’t think of anything else that you will might need to add or change on it at all! Your information extends beyond what is expected, but also extensive, concise, and, most importantly, extremely readable and engaging! GOOD WORK!
This topic clearly is extremely broad – and requires a whole lot of information to be covered. The students have done well in trying to reduce the denseness of the text as much as possible – however it is still quite hard to read the whole page at once and can get slightly tiresome. I think where possible you should just try and add a variety of media files, more videos and animations that will reduce the denseness of the whole page.
Most of the text used is relevant and necessary – so some time should be spent trying to cut down as much as possible, however it might be beneficial to adjust the position of the images within the text – just to seemingly break up the denseness of the text and the format of the page. The tables used in the page are relevant and informative – however there are quite a lot used.
A good page that tackles an extremely extensive amount of information needed to be covered. The page does well and there are just a few things that need fixing up to improve the page. The referencing throughout the page is well done and most of the images had correct copyright and referencing material.
You guys did very well for such a large topic your content you effectively reported on a large scope of related topics, your report is very well structured, with the right amount of pictures and tapes used to break up the text. Extensive work was done and this is apparent in many of your sections especially in the background information section, perhaps more content could be added to the introduction and the sub heading of male infertility disorders with more research and possibly an image.
Overall the majority of your referencing is sound, with all images being correctly referenced. I would advise you to ensure that all your content especially the data and statistics in your content and tables are correctly referenced. Additionally, you may benefit from introducing some form of animal models perhaps in a new future research/ clinical trials section, or in the treatment section.
Whilst the use of the video is awesome, perhaps a different video should be selected, one that is more specific to your content and not infertility in general, as this the video is more about female infertility rather than males. The background information heading is great for establishing a common base knowledge for all of the site visitors - perhaps you could incorporate a link to Mark hills lectures on this topic or incorporate a video he used to teach the content in either the labs or the lecture.
Overall, your project is looking great you just need a few minor adjustments, and once you have finished adding the content I am confident that you will have a great project.